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~*A Lesson Learnt*~
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 08:55:27 AM in AEST
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A Lesson Learnt…
Reminiscing on yester days
When dandelion chains beared my years of innocence
Life was simple back then
A youth basking merrily
Underneath the silky rays of the sun
A recollection of laughter, tears and memories
When all went crazily wrong
Mother kissed away all the tears and pain
Everything was so much better then
Years traveled at lightning speed
Rebellious teenage years
Kept my parents on the edge
With many sleepless nights
Will she come home safely tonight?
They needn’t worry back those days
It was safe to leave the back door unlocked
The streets were harmless and
People were more trustworthy
In my prime years to follow
I ended up finding myself a man
To the utter disappointment of my mother
I was no longer her little girl anymore
She could not protect me from life’s adversities
Helpless she held her head in her hands
Distraught she put on a brave face
Yet with a mother’s intuition
She knew just too well
That my matrimonial bliss
Would end up in years of hell
I wished that what I know now
I knew back then
Life has taught me many lessons
What doesn’t break me makes me stronger
And yet I still manage to soldier on
Now I sit down with my children
Gently pushing each golden dandelion
To form a delicate chain
I will not shelter them from life’s calamities,
But shall be there to catch them when they fall.
By Sue Mina
Sept. 23rd 2008
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by karoody on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 09:13:46 AM AEST
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This is such a beautifully elegant write. Welcome back to the site! I do not believe i knew you before but it is a privelage to know you. It is obvious that life has been quite a journey for you, but you have made no mistakes. Mistakes are only made when you learn nothing. You have so much wisdom now. Kudos, sweetheart! I look forward to more of your work
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by Rage on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 11:12:38 AM AEST
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| Wow... This is inspirational. Thank u |
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 11:24:09 AM AEST
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It's really great to see you posting again, Sue... and what a potent write it is.... I think most parents go thru this and some non-parents (like myself)..lol...I absolutely love this part-->
"Now I sit down with my children
Gently pushing each golden dandelion
To form a delicate chain
I will not shelter them from life’s calamities,
But shall be there to catch them when they fall."
Thank you for taking me down memory lane..
Hugs
Jenni
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 11:50:22 AM AEST
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what a beautiful poem! full of honest gentle truth and written with a hearts warmth...truly beautiful!!
hugs n' love nessa
keep 'em coming sweetie! |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by NoSaint on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 03:13:58 PM AEST
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I am so glad you are back...so much truth here...but each bump in the road prepares us for something ahead or opens new avenues we never would have seen...we only see a small part of the picture...and you are right all we can do is pick them up after life KO's our children...
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 10:27:22 PM AEST
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Oh hunni!!! You POSTED IT!!!!
I'm so glad. Like I told you before, this is so real and so YOU. There is much in here that stirs the emotion and
tugs at the old heart strings. I love how you began it with the dandelion chain and ended it with the same. It shows
how life travels in circles and always comes back around. I believe in Karma; in that what we send out, comes back
to us. Those who hurt us, will get what they deserve, sweets and you will have many glorious days ahead in
payment for the wonderful things you are and have done.
This piece's style is something different from what you've done before and I LOVE that! I love that you've
branched out and discovered another side of your art. Well done, poet!! :D (Thanks for sharing this with me)
SO good to have you back!!
*hugs and bunches of dandelions*
~ Breezy
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 27th September 2008 @ 02:56:54 AM AEST
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Well it is certainly about time. A year and a half? It seems like much longer since you've posted. We've been waiting and here you have given us something that was worth the wait.
I can never express how much I adore "raw, unedited" poetry. I used to do this all the time. These days I seem to edit and change a little of each poem from it's intial muse. Maybe editing and changing makes a poem read better and gives it a better comprehension, but THIS in your poem shows that all in all the most powerful portion of poetry is the intial inspiration put onto paper as soon as the muse hits. That effort in itself is deeply and profoundly poetic.
I loved the dandelion chain metaphor and loved the overall setiment completely. I am overwhelmed how you treaded through your memories and lead us to your children acknowledging that they will tread many of those trails as well. I think it is the difference in a mother to a father. A mother seems to understand youth, innocence, and triumph more than a man does. It is as if men sometimes forget that they were young unless they are telling some story which makes them seem heroic, lol. Trust me I am a man. I know of what I speak. Unfortunately at times I am of what I speak.
This is a perfect mother to child letter/poem and it is a wonderful piece. I hope we don't have to wait another year and a half to read your work again.
SUPERB!
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by wizard on
Saturday, 27th September 2008 @ 08:01:12 AM AEST
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i'm so glad you posted again,
beautifully done Sue,
wiz
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by redsleeve on
Saturday, 27th September 2008 @ 08:58:37 AM AEST
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absolutely astounding!
"dandelion chains"
very beautiful!
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by spooky on
Sunday, 28th September 2008 @ 01:41:56 AM AEST
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we make mistakes in life, but we learn from the heartbreaks, the sad times and even the bad times,, but we still go forth doing the best that we can ,,i will never give up on what life has thrown at me ,as you will always stand up and fight another day,,,well written my friend in words,,spooky
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 28th September 2008 @ 01:50:08 AM AEST
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this is beautiful.. im glad to see you writing again.. sorry i haven't been around as much.. I am busy with going to drs and stuff . but as soon as i get a chance i will be on more.. plus i work and we are in the process of getting a house..
Lovely beautiful heart felt!! just amazing from ya
Rock on,
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by shelby on
Sunday, 28th September 2008 @ 03:57:10 PM AEST
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This is incredible so beautiful Sue.
Good to see you back.
Huggers
Michelle |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 28th September 2008 @ 06:08:57 PM AEST
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Awsome write, deep and full of emotion, thank you for sharing this.
The Phantom |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st October 2008 @ 01:55:40 AM AEST
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Well, I too, am certainly glad to see this!
I love the inclusion of the dandelion chains, not only each a circle in itself, but together forming a chain and ultimately another circle. Just think, one day they will sit with their children and make chains, with fond memories of doing that with their mother.
Welcome back Sue, and be welcomed! |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by roseabsolute on
Thursday, 2nd October 2008 @ 02:03:51 AM AEST
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Hind sight is something huh? It's quite
useful when we live our future according to it
though, and your children are so blessed to
have you there to catch them. Lovely writing.
Rose* |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd October 2008 @ 07:13:57 AM AEST
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Welcome back Sue, and this is more than
lovely, and your magical way of conveying
thruth along with innocence, is as ever
apparent, inother words, our first lady of
poetry, has gracefully gracesed us with
her treasurse of love pain and time honored
gienus . . . This was simply spiritual in an
earthly way . . .
ty likewise susan, 4 your readership and
friendship . . .
((((Roo))))
Ben . . . |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Loende on
Friday, 3rd October 2008 @ 09:56:10 AM AEST
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Oh, the lessons...
Would we all be in such a hurry to grow up if we knew what waited for us?
This is a really touching look at a life and the stages of it, until it flows into other lives. I loved that you came full circle with the daisy chains and beginning the cycle again with your own children.
It's a lovely, from the heart write and I'm so glad to have read it.
Love,
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th October 2008 @ 06:30:09 PM AEST
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(((((((((( Suzie Q ))))))))))
Welcome back to the writing world. I am so glad to see you back at it again!!!
*huge hug*
Ah, life, life, life, and the lessons learned. I love this story about the three generations. The mother who worries about the daughter who is now the mother who worries about her children. Very nice. Very nice indeed.
You have captured so much here. Love, caring, paternal / maternal instincts, mistakes, choices and what happens when we pursue those choices.
Funny how when we grow up we find ourselves saying if only we knew then what we know now.
Yep, this is a bit different for the Suzie Q and I like it.
Thank you for sharing. Thank you for you.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th October 2008 @ 07:04:06 PM AEST
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| This is a really nice piece of writing. I, too learn the hard way that certain people are not deserving of a place in our hearts. Great job. |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by yangdantien on
Friday, 17th October 2008 @ 02:45:02 PM AEST
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Wonderful to see your post and a thousand Blessing to you and the ankle biters...
Love the image of a chain of golden dandelions in response to Nietzsche's realization...
Peace
AJ |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd October 2009 @ 03:43:27 PM AEST
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| wonderful poem and yes different from your norm but still very good |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2014 @ 10:54:27 AM AEST
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Oh Sue.
I thoroughly enjoyed this poem, and yes, it is different than your usual, but it is so perfect in its honesty. Life teaches us many lessons, and many are painful, but necessary. Each 'mistake' we make can become a beacon for change in others. I love how you conveyed this message.
~Scorp |
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Re: ~*A Lesson Learnt*~
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 20th April 2019 @ 03:52:24 AM AEST
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Sad reality but an awesome write.
You wrote the feelings we all have in life! |
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