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Living Will
Contributed by
navydocny
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Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 10:19:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Don’t pull the sheet, up over its head
Injured quite mortally, but not yet dead
Do you think that we, should easily give in
Surrendering to failure, and its courtly sin
Though its death rattle, still razes our ears
I’ve little to relinquish, and give in to fear
The greatest strength, which someone will bear
Is when you have nothing, then you cannot despair
Torn and desiccated, this corporal display
Might still live again, to see another day
More than the surgeon’s skill, it will take
The will to live and, to live for love’s sake
We each stand on sides, which are opposite facing
To give all that we have, to not is debasing
Intrepid our manner, we can stave off death’s glance
Reviving our love, we’ll have another chance
Copyright ©
navydocny
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2008-09-24 10:19:40]
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Re: Living Will
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 12:32:31 PM AEST
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steve,
this is one of my favorite ones from you. there is just so much of you in this. so much depth. very thought provoking.
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Re: Living Will
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by Lilymaemax on
Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 04:38:18 PM AEST
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When you describe this relationship you know how much you want it too work.You can feel it thru your expressions.Beautifully expressed steve.
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Re: Living Will
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th September 2008 @ 09:06:43 AM AEST
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A major expression of metaphor and poetry! This is magnificent. I love the comparison of death to a dying love and I am enticed by the imagery you've selected as well as the strength in it's final message. This is damn fine art. Splendid!
Superb!
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Re: Living Will
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by wizard on
Thursday, 25th September 2008 @ 09:55:45 AM AEST
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so much hope in this Steve...nicely done,
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Re: Living Will
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th September 2008 @ 11:28:47 PM AEST
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I'm with SCM. What an incredible metaphor! Steve, your heart is immense
and nowhere does it scream for more, than in this piece. YOUR will is strong
and evident. I love how that shines through in all of your work. You know
I will be thinking about you and hoping and praying for you. :)
You have (in not only this, but most of your work) displayed a
truth and devotion that most would die for. Hold onto that. It is
damn beautiful!
~ Breezy
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Re: Living Will
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 09:48:42 AM AEST
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Steve,
I share the same sentiments as my fellow
poetess Breezy. Your will is very strong and
evident. A beautifully expressed and written
poem. Chin up friend. I wish you the very best.
hugs & prayers,
dreamer
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