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The Scream Within
Contributed by
Lilymaemax
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Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 07:42:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
FamilyPoems
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You scream within
But the day goes on,
You scream within
Till everyone is gone.
You scream within
The housework to be done,
You scream within
Ironing,washing all waiting what fun.
You scream within
Is this your lot in life
You scream within
What you became when you were a wife.
You scream within
Then you realize he, is screaming too
You scream within
He,s going to work,for wages so few.
He screams within
He does it for me,endlessly
He screams within
He loves me so selflessly.
He screams within
He wants the best for me and kin
He screams within
Lifes hard but worth all the din.
We scream within
But with such understanding
We scream within
Hoping for our happy neverending.
Copyright ©
Lilymaemax
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2008-09-24 07:42:29]
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Re: The Scream Within
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by navydocny on
Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 08:11:14 AM AEST
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Isn't that what its all about...
Very nice and I love the acknowledgement of your husband.
I hope you get your happy neverending!
Great write, great flow. great everything....
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Re: The Scream Within
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th September 2008 @ 09:19:40 AM AEST
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A solid work! At first I was like "hey give your wife a break guy, it's rude to post this publicly!" Then I got to the part where I realized you were the wife, talking to yourself and then you acknowledged your husband's issues. Splendid job how you rolled this all into a solid piece. I second navy's notion. I hope you two find your happy neverending.
BRAVO!
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Re: The Scream Within
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 25th September 2008 @ 05:04:23 PM AEST
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A very well penned write you have
here dearest Lily~
I share the same sentiments as
my fellow poets. I wish you two both
a happy neverending. Thanks for sharing
you work with us. A most enjoyable read.
hugs,
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Re: The Scream Within
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th September 2008 @ 11:50:06 PM AEST
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What a write! You have brought to light emotions that I find
myself running through most of the day and evening. And you
penned them with so much vigor! (I think the repetition of the
scream within helps that)
Lovely sentiment, in the end and an enormous message. We should
never forget, no matter the stress and pain of our day, that
someone else may be going through as much, if not more! :)
Tremendous post!
~ Breezy
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Re: The Scream Within
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2009 @ 05:17:42 AM AEST
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Wow, you really pack a punch with this one. You have so expertly captured what life is about for so many couples. Excellent.
Thank you for an enjoyable read.
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