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Ever After All
Contributed by
Loende
on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2008 @ 12:54:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I searched for me,
In all the forgotten places inside.
Past the twisted, threadbare corridors,
Where the air is still and used.
Was there life there once?
Did the light ever break through the gloom?
Because I swear to God,
It seems unlikely, if not impossible.
Faded things, forged things that once sang,
Beautiful voices raised in joy.
With all of the kindness of the past
They now echo in a hollow way.
I had plans, in amongst the fight.
There would be a purpose and a reason,
Despite the madness and needs,
That churned and whirled within.
The wind took me places.
Tumbled me around like driftwood,
Until I dropped down and shook my head,
Unsure of where I was and why.
Still, it all made sense at the time,
A kind of shiny, crystal clarity
That burned so clear I breathed light
And opened my arms for the sun.
For endless moments, I resisted it
Even though it tasted so damn good.
Fought the inevitable push and pull
But grudgingly, I was as helpless as the rest.
And in the end, I was willing.
I knew the water would rise and bathe me,
Wrap me in warmth, holding me up.
I knew you would do that to me.
I chose to jump in with my eyes wide,
Breathing in all that made me love you.
Steeping in you until I didn’t end
And you, you were the beginning.
Do you remember how it was?
How we woke up each day and moved?
To the beat only we could hear.
Dancing upright in the rain.
It never occurred to me to flinch,
Or pull away, even when you were.
I just stood there and let the knives,
Make a pile of shattered heartbeats.
So I look for myself now,
Despite the pain it pretends to mask,
In the hoped for happily ever after.
Ever After, all used up and cold.
Please understand that I accept my part,
My own disillusioned disaster,
That likely led to the inevitable,
Where there was no one else around.
But now, on the bitter cold outside,
I miss the heat and heartbeats.
It’s too quiet in the dark
And whatever I mutter to fill it scares me.
It’s not lies, exactly, but the shades of
Something so spectacular that it defies
The history of the ages, my history.
A not-so-happily-ever-after-all.
It’s a vivid and totally fictional account
Of the greatest thing that ever passed
A fire that was white hot, but didn’t burn.
It was who I was and might ever be.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2008-09-23 12:54:34]
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Re: Ever After All
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 26th September 2008 @ 11:11:44 AM AEST
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I can't believe that nobody has commented
on this remarkable piece of poetry.
Your work speaks volumes.
These lines are superb:
It never occurred to me to flinch,
Or pull away, even when you were.
I just stood there and let the knives,
Make a pile of shattered heartbeats.
So I look for myself now,
Despite the pain it pretends to mask,
In the hoped for happily ever after.
Ever After, all used up and cold.
Time heals all wounds my dear poetess.
Here's to much brighter days ahead
An exceptional post. Keep up the great work
hugs,
dreamer |
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Re: Ever After All
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by wizard on
Sunday, 28th September 2008 @ 09:26:56 AM AEST
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very nicely done,
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Re: Ever After All
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 30th September 2008 @ 10:01:20 AM AEST
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Analogies, questions, pain, sadness, metaphoric genius, great imagery, a sense of being lost, hurt, resistance, giving in, are what things came to mind as I read this. Life... a life's chapter. Seems any comment I leave will not do this poem justice. I just know I can relate to it and that is a lot of what poetry is about to me. Great job!!!
Take care,
Tim
(who however must admit I do not understand your Author's Note)
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Re: Ever After All
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd September 2009 @ 09:22:13 AM AEST
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Ouch. Sweetie, trying to find yourself after you've been part of "two" is difficult indeed.
Disillusionment never seems to breathe wisdom, does it. Time moves on and changes the
scenery until we hardly recognize ourselves even when we do have the frame of mind to
notice. Feeling our way through life has moments where we are too anxious to keep
going. We stop and reflect on where we have been in hopes that it may shed some
light on current bearings. This was so melancholy. I won't say sad, because there
is still an air of contentment(?) here. Like you are saying to yourself, okay, yeah-
we made a mistake. But it's time to learn and move on.
Brilliant writing, hun, as always.
~ Breezy
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