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Screen between Us
Contributed by
crow
on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 02:30:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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...and what do You want for Christmas,I asked.
I could almost hear Her heart pounding
through the silence.
...closed My eyes...
to late..
could not take it back.
I felt a wish rise like heat shimmers
in a desert waste..
She did not answer back, on the "screen between Us.
....and You? what do You want for Christmas, She asked.
I sat back had one wish, not one came after,
in the silence.
I felt the wish rise..
to late..
could not find the words...
did not answer back, on "the screen between Us.
..In the dulled time
before Sun rises life,
I stepped upon the fresh morning dew..
and answered to quickly...Lane
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2008-09-20 02:30:03]
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Re: Screen between Us
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 05:45:14 AM AEST
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Hmmm interesting write....
My mind is running a little wild here....
Hope you both got what you wanted...
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Re: Screen between Us
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by karoody on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 01:02:14 PM AEST
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so what did you ask for?
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Re: Screen between Us
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by shelby on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 02:33:28 PM AEST
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Yes what did you wish for?? I am confused a bit with this one.............
Hey you stood me up!!!!!!!!!! Ya *****!
hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Screen between Us
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by shelby on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 02:34:24 PM AEST
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oh and I like this write but I love all of your writes.
That still doesn't let you off the big hook I got ya now LOL
me |
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Re: Screen between Us
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by NoSaint on
Saturday, 20th September 2008 @ 11:07:22 PM AEST
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I'm a little lost here...will need some guidance on this one my friend...but as always I enjoy your writes
Shari |
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Re: Screen between Us
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 21st September 2008 @ 03:14:16 AM AEST
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so you were online then went out and spent time with nature? thats what i see here, a very peaceful write,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Screen between Us
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by elle on
Sunday, 21st September 2008 @ 02:18:29 PM AEST
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| it's an interesting hook, the way you use hesitation to accommodate the idea of an inconvenient quickness. could it be . . that you wanted the both of you to want the same thing. . . perhaps. . . each other. . . splendid write. elle |
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Re: Screen between Us
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th October 2008 @ 08:39:05 AM AEST
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My dear friend, Lane,
For some reason a picture of a screen door came to mind
when I read the title. But now I realize you meant the monitor
screen. Ah yes, we sometimes frighten ourselves with our own
thoughts, do we not? Questions we want answers to but are
afraid to answer them ourselves. Sometimes we don't want
to know. Sometimes we just DON"Tknow. ah, life. It's a kick
ain't it? lol
This was a treat. You are human after all. lol Good to know. ;)
~ Breezy
(I've got a lot of compliments on the song. You did
an EXCEPTIONAL job hun. Thank you again!)
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