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trapped
Contributed by
polaris773
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Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 10:39:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Trapped in the same place again
No windows to see the world changing outside
No way to see your smile again
Enclosed in these walls forever
Never thought I would miss the rain
Just the feeling of being engulfed
Just something other than darkness
The salt water from my eyes are starting to burn
Maybe if I hit my head against these walls again
I hope they fall before I fall
I hope you didn’t forget me
Ill see you again if only in the rain
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polaris773
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2008-09-09 10:39:07]
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Re: trapped
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 10:44:49 AM AEST
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This entire write called out to me on many levels.
The mention of the rain really added to the feel of this.
Deeply emotive and a well written poem.
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Re: trapped
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 09:25:17 PM AEST
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I hate doing this, as I've told many others, but this line is fabulous,
"Never thought I would miss the rain"
Just, WOW! That is a poem in and of itself! There is so much emotion
just in those words alone. They surround the reader and reach into
his very soul! That is what poetry is.. a capturing of the soul. To
take it and make it bleed feeling !! Well done!!
~ Breezy
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