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Farewell to you my love.
Contributed by
FRANCO
on
Thursday, 4th September 2008 @ 11:16:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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Long ago, I reckon me a reckless teen
old enough to hold her in my arms, but not
So to have my pint of beer; she came smoothly
into my slothful solitary life, made me deem
to be an unbound bird, who can very well fly.
There wasn’t a lane or a joint we didn’t prowled
me ‘nd she played an inseparable role setting fire
Of envy wherever we strolled, my slothful life turned
out be a beautiful song of love, which I sang merrily as
we rod along every road.
As time rolled, we grew older and bolder and did what lads
of my time ever dare to do; we set out on daring ventures, - icy nights
and scorching days matter not to us, until one day; she coldly laid -
motionless, broken and shattered as I held her in my arms
tearfully whispering “good bye to you my love” here again,
me to myself on the dreadful lone long road.
She so beautiful - came into my life as a gift, now lay hit by an
automobile; ‘sigh’ my days on roads never be the same without her;
’O’ she - my beloved bicycle.
-FRANCO-
Copyright ©
FRANCO
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2008-09-04 23:16:08]
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by navydocny on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 12:15:45 AM AEST
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Very good write!
Keep up the strong work!
Steve |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 01:36:00 AM AEST
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oh no! oh franco you got me! lol! i was all sad for her then it was your bike, oh this is too cute, fabulous writing!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 02:27:11 AM AEST
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Wow, what a trickster. The double meaning
is delivered perfectly, and is beautifully
written. By the way, so sorry for your loss.
~Jesse |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by wizard on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 03:21:15 AM AEST
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franco, that was great my friend, you had me hooked all the way through... nicely done,
wiz |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by J-A-X on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 03:35:04 AM AEST
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that was sick man..i think u fooled everybody with the bike part lol..but good poetic expression and way to lure people in.
my thoughts go out to the bike. |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 06:37:54 AM AEST
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Oh Franco!! You nawtee, nawtee boy!! I am not usually fooled by these...but you got me good... I loved this.... I was almost in tears..until the last line...lmao..
Well done, my friend...
Jenni |
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Re: Farewell to you my love.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 10:38:45 PM AEST
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Okay, Franco, you bad boy! lol You have done this to us more than once!
I can't believe I fall for it every time. lol (Curse you! j/k)
It's not as easy as it looks to write with such a twist and you do it so
impossibly well, my friend. I was swept away with your words in the
first few stanzas and then found myself "taken" by the last one. *smiles*
Well done to evoke so much passion over a bicycle, poet! lol Your
personification has brought a tear to my eye. *wink*
Perfection, as always!
*thoughts, hugs and prayers*
~ Breezy
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