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The truth behind the broken mirror
Contributed by
LauraMary
on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 05:07:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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She walks over and stares at me.
I reflect her though I do not want to.
She wants to see something else.
Something I am not able to show her.
She stands there tugging at her skin,
with a look in her eyes that I am saddened to copy.
She cries, and as her wet tears hit the floor
mine dry hit the silver emptiness to which I am kept.
She falls foward as I do the same.
She's ashamed to look at me.
I do not wish to make her weep.
I smash.
Not because she is hideous.
But because she is beautiful.
And she will never know it.
It it my fault?
I suppose she just needs a knew mirror.
Copyright ©
LauraMary
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2008-08-30 05:07:00]
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by wizard on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 05:54:20 AM AEST
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awesome write, i love the whole idea of the mirror telling the tale,
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by DukeW on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 08:19:49 AM AEST
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| "wet tears" Cmone, u can do better than that. (Sorry for the criticism, but i felt it was needed) Other than that i agree with wiz, great idea with the mirror. |
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 08:35:31 AM AEST
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What an incredible piece of writting, and a
such a vivid style, you had my imagination
on a leash as though you were walking me
through your heart and soul . . .
thank you likewise for your comment and
read on my poem, everything i write, i write
for my wife of 41 years, like your poetry, she
to is magnificent, she's my insperation and
my eternal love . . . again thank you and keep
up the splended writting . . .
Ben . . . |
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by eeeitak on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 01:15:51 PM AEST
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This has always been one of my favorites
"I smash.
Not because she is hideous.
But because she is beautiful.
And she will never know it."
I love that. So much. Gooosh this is so original and so emotional and just. Incredible. :)
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by Muinanyere on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 02:47:11 PM AEST
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"mine dry hit the silver emptiness to which I am kept"
for some reason that line hit me the most, this is wonderful write and so sad, I know exactly how you feel , if you ever want someone to talk to I will be here |
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2008 @ 01:50:42 PM AEST
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Excellent write... loved the concept...
(wondering, though, if you meant to say 'new' mirror?
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Re: The truth behind the broken mirror
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by LauraMary on
Tuesday, 2nd September 2008 @ 03:02:26 PM AEST
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*new
Sorry about that.
Didn't even realise I made such an obvious mistake! |
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