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cant u see??
Contributed by
PixieLovezChrisSchwoerer
on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 02:16:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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cant u see??
this is how its meant to be
friends is all that we can be..
we were once lovers,
who trusted each other,
but u had a doubt,
and no longer trusted me,
u believe wat ppl tell u,
and dnt even take the time
to listen to me...
cnt u see??
that we just cnt be..
no longer lovers,
and maybe not friends...
we moved to fast,
our love didnt last..
weve grown apart,
we have no future together..
we go our separate ways,
we cnt look each other in the face..
so many lies,
to much pain...
cnt u see?
we just cnt be...
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2008-08-26 02:16:59]
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Re: cant u see??
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by navydocny on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 05:09:30 AM AEST
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If this is indeed a message to a young man, it will be confusing. Its a nice way of putting how you feel, but you are starting with being friends and ending with you can't be.
As a former young man, trust me, it will be confusing...
Very choppy, but the emotion is there. Bridle it and your message will clear...
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Re: cant u see??
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by allforyou on
Tuesday, 26th August 2008 @ 06:36:49 AM AEST
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i feel this in my heart. the last 4 lines sum it all up and made me just feel so sad. this piece is very easy to relate to. i think everyone has had to deal with saying goodbye to someone even when they dont' want to and its so hard, but theres just no way they can say hello again because of something that was said or done.
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Re: cant u see??
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by wizard on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 01:31:33 AM AEST
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so full of sadness and longing, nicely done,
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Re: cant u see??
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st September 2008 @ 11:01:55 AM AEST
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I just cnt n dnt git it. Wut iz dis about? Who iz dis 4? Do u akuly believe dis iz poe it tree? Dis haz 2 b de poem dat 8 poetry.
cnt u c?
this is one of the most ridiculous things I have ever seen posted on this site only rivaled by the other poem of yours I commented on. I'm sorry. I got a little ahead of myself. This is not poetry, nor was the other post. Learn the English language toss your cell phone in the river it is frying your brain.
Learn to spell, comprehend English, quit bastardizing poetry and perhaps spend more time in the books and less on your looks. Cuz they ain't no such thing as half way crooks.
Dung!
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