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Specialisn'ttheword
Contributed by
Forgotten_soul
on
Sunday, 24th August 2008 @ 03:29:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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asking
why again
it hurts
why does it hurt?
I can't think
think
why
why what?
why can't I breathe
I'm fine
I'm breathing fine
I need it
something
Something I need
I need to get out
out
out
OUT
my skin is
itching
metaphorically
speaking
I think
I think I'm speaking through chapped lips
I think I'm picking
picking again
always picking
and it hurts
should it hurt?
why do I make it hurt?
there it is
why
always why
I'm running out of reasons
losing again
failing
and it isn't so bad
right?
to bad
it can't be better
why can't it be better
oh god
It won't get better
It won't stop
make it stop
it never stops
stop twisting
I'm twisting
under pressure
again
but I never did
never felt it
suffocating
again
not again
I think maybe
maybe it won't hurt
maybe not today
not now
no
no
NO
but it does
it always does
Copyright ©
Forgotten_soul
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2008-08-24 03:29:36]
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Re: Specialisn'ttheword
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 24th August 2008 @ 06:15:20 AM AEST
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Deep write, I mean you were in there, I felt it. Well done.
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Re: Specialisn'ttheword
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st September 2008 @ 11:11:13 AM AEST
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You are absolutely right Sir! This is word vomit, literally!
This makes no sense, the rhythmn is atrocious! The poem is ridiculous. Surely you have better to offer than this. This is a display that makes poetry and poets look like things I wish not explain.
Either stop writing or write something better.
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Re: Specialisn'ttheword
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by Jazzyfizzle on
Tuesday, 9th September 2008 @ 12:15:56 PM AEST
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| i really liked this write. there were phrases in it that i thought were just amazing. great job. |
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