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Fading Ember
Contributed by
shelby
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Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 11:31:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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We think of ourselves at times
as the forever flame, always burning.
A spark that will be as it is right this moment.
Then at once in an instance of judgement.
at times bad judgement on a rainy day.
Life changes in that second, embers die, fade away.
One glance and that moment sticks with you.
Burned in your brain, not instantly fading in your memory.
The big truck rolls, the rain comes down,
miles left behind us, miles left in front.
That one second stays with some, stayed with us.
Disrupting thoughts, reality vague and clearly mapped.
Hard not to have ones heart a bit tender, we did not know them.
Someone did, someone loved them, the fire, now the ember that died.
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shelby
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2008-08-23 11:31:58]
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Re: Fading Ember
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by Spike on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 03:10:25 PM AEST
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Shel, you captured the universal reaction from your specific circumstance. A compelling, 'makes you think' read.
The forever flame was a nice touch.
S. |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by zenith66 on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 05:33:41 PM AEST
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| yes you truly did capture it, it is these moments that make us human, and make us realize how precious life is, fantastic write here friend, some stunning lines, " miles left behind us, miles left in front" loved that, overall its wa toucing and unique, keep it up!! |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 11:35:18 PM AEST
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That must have been a very sobering sight, one that I think many people have every day. If you can take away from it what you did, well that's appreciating life. Well written and softly emotive.
~Jesse |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by Crow on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 11:42:00 PM AEST
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| I know the effect of this..really gives us a check on our mortality..good write Shel...Lane |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by funnyface09 on
Sunday, 24th August 2008 @ 02:56:42 AM AEST
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how can i not love what you wrote there..is beautiful..is like a picture of the whole feeling thing presented so accurately...
cheers to my fav poet..:) |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 25th August 2008 @ 08:10:34 PM AEST
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brilliant and beautiful piece. You have capture so well feelings and emotions that some of us have trouble putting into words. Great job Shel.
hugs
Rich |
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Re: Fading Ember
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 10:44:17 PM AEST
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Unbelievably sad, Michelle. What a hopelessly melancholy and
desperate write. It's impossible not to feel a connection when witness
to such sadness. And you've done a fine job of sharing the emotion
with us. Take care, hun.
*hugs*
~ Breezy |
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