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End of the Night
Contributed by
joe89
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Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 02:43:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
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when the day ends
and the air turns thin
theres a cold smell of soil
airing from the tarmac
you can taste peaches in the breeze
your eyelids beg to close
but your just not ready
to give up the day yet
the night sky stares at me
safe in the knowlege
that he will always be here tomorow
and what scares me the most
is i however
will not...
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joe89
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2008-08-23 02:43:49]
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Re: End of the Night
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by zenith66 on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 09:23:47 AM AEST
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you have expressed your fear of death here beautifully, really, it was lovley, how you get the feeling of night being eternal, unlike you, and that kind of scares the reader lol, an abrubt shock after such an engagin read, great write here, keep it up!!1
see you in the next life lol |
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Re: End of the Night
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 23rd August 2008 @ 10:08:29 AM AEST
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I love the concept in this poem.... I was actually sorry it wasn't longer as I thought much more could have been done with it....
(Just my humble opinion)
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Re: End of the Night
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by Lee on
Wednesday, 27th August 2008 @ 12:45:09 AM AEST
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what a stark revelation to be found in a poem.
Good write.
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