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*This Will Make You Cry...*
Contributed by
Anna
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Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 12:05:00 AM in AEST
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Jenny was so happy about the house they had found
For once in her life it was on the right side of town.
She unpacked her things with such great ease
As she watched her new curtains blow in the breeze.
How wonderful it was to have her own room.
School would be starting; she'd have friends over soon.
There'd be sleep-overs, and parties; she was so happy
It's just the way she wanted her life to be.
On the first day of school, everything went great.
She made new friends and even got a date!
She thought, "I want to be popular and I'm going to be,
Because I just got a date with the star of the team!"
To be known in this school you had to have a clout,
And dating this guy would sure help her out.
There was only one problem stopping her fate.
Her parents had said she was too young to date.
"Well, I just won't tell them the entire truth.
They won't know the difference; what's there to lose?"
Jenny asked to stay with her friends that night.
Her parents frowned but said, "All right."
Excited, she got ready for the big event
But as she rushed around like she had no sense,
She began to feel guilty about all the lies,
But what's a pizza, a party, and a moonlight ride?
Well the pizza was good, and the party was great,
But the moonlight ride would have to wait.
For Jeff was half drunk by this time.
She felt someone remove her from the twisted rubble,
And heard, call an ambulance
These kids are in trouble!
Voices she heard...a few words at best.
But she knew there were two cars
involved in the wreck.
Then wondered to herself if Jeff was all right,
And if the people in the other car were alive.
She awoke in the hospital to faces so sad.
"You've been in a wreck and it looks pretty bad."
These voices echoed inside her head,
As they gently told her that Jeff was dead.
They said "Jenny, we've done all we can do.
But it looks as if we'll lose you too."
"But the people in the other car!? "Jenny cried.
"We're sorry, Jenny, they also died."
Jenny prayed, "God, forgive me for what I've done
I only wanted to have just one night of fun."
"Tell those people's family, I've made their lives dim,
And wish I could return their families to them."
"Tell Mum and Dad I'm sorry I lied,
And that it's my fault so many have died.
Oh, nurse, won't you please tell them that for me?"
The nurse just stood there-she never agreed.
But took Jenny's hand with tears in her eyes.
And a few moments later Jenny died.
A man asked the nurse,
"Why didn't you do your best?"
To bid that girl her one last request?"
She looked at the man with eyes so sad.
"Because the people in the other car
were her mum and dad."
This story is sad and unpleasant but true,
So young people take heed, it could have been you.
Copyright ©
Anna
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2003-03-18 00:05:00]
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Re: *This Will Make You Cry...*
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by mblondiepink on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 05:18:48 AM AEST
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| Oh my God!!! Great poem. You were right it will make you cry. |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 10:18:50 AM AEST
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God!! What an unexpected twist at the end. Such a sad poem. Brilliant! You have real talent!
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by MorbidAngel on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 05:48:19 PM AEST
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| Yes, this is a very good poem indeed, but after this being about the 15th time reading it..just isnt surprising..ohwell...Tis a great poem.. |
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by yellow_sundragon on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 07:20:28 PM AEST
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Did you write this? because I've read this everywhere as an annonamous author... and if it's yours, then I want to give credit...
YS |
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by kittiekat on
Saturday, 26th April 2003 @ 01:32:13 PM AEST
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wow....This poem is amazing! It's so sad and tragic...waa!! mommy! Brings tears to my eyes, with all this drama happening and it makes you think. It's good to be alive.
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by poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 9th May 2004 @ 01:45:09 PM AEST
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| I WAS on my site rereading my poem i just wrote. i glanced over to the right and saw the title of this poem so i clicked on it. it is truely sad and tears roll down my face. beautiful poem. thanks for sharing. good write.sandy |
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by Princesaazul16 on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 07:55:52 AM AEST
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| Woah! I liked this a lot. Great twist. You did a very good job. ~Stace~ |
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by JennyFruFru on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 08:56:10 PM AEST
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| wow this is so sad and freaks me out.... its sad to think that such things and coicedences can happen... |
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 06:41:04 PM AEST
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| OMG!!!! When I got to the end, my jaw dropped. WOW!!!!! What a sad write. It was true? That makeit even more sad. *S* Cynthia |
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by reprobate on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:52:29 PM AEST
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| very, very sad. |
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by Soulless on
Wednesday, 26th May 2004 @ 05:47:35 PM AEST
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Hey Ive read this poem on a website, it was like funny junk and they had a little sad poem on there. I dont know if your trying to claim this poem as yours or what but I am glad you posted it anyway. Very tragic although this is like the 5th time I have read it at 5 different sites. It never gets old and Im glad you shared it on this site with those who havent read it.
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by MellaSwtASHonee on
Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 08:38:09 PM AEST
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| this poem was really sad...but i really really enjoyed it!.. |
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 07:28:49 AM AEST
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very, very sad indeed!
and very true.
the twist in the end keeps it together more.
but it's still extremely heart-breaking! |
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by lovespoetic0518 on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 03:47:57 PM AEST
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Okay, that was REALLY good, and it gave me chills at the end. Seriously, the best "story" poem I've read by far. Very good work. Thankyou for posting it.
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by Trisha on
Friday, 25th June 2004 @ 09:56:48 PM AEST
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| Dang You're Right This Was Good. I Was Really Into This. I hope This Isn't True But It Can Happen In Really life. |
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by Monkeybones99 on
Saturday, 3rd July 2004 @ 04:07:24 PM AEST
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| Just want to say great write keep up the good work. |
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Re: *This Will Make You Cry...*
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by Brians_Sweety on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 04:11:31 PM AEST
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OH MY GOODNESS this poem is awesome. It touched me alot right now. I was just informed by someone I hold close to my heart. That he got caught drinking last night. He told me about a month ago that he would drink or smoke anymore and he got caught drinking last night so I don't know whats in store for us. I really thank you for sharing this poem it means alot to me right now.!!!
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by Justalady on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 01:57:52 PM AEST
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| Sad is an "understatement" I've also read this on a website and have no way of knowing if you are the true author or not. Nevertheless the message brings emotion to the reader and hopefully some good does come of it. I lost a nephew because of drinking and spent many hours watching the life drain from his body. Have a pleasant day. June |
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by white_rain_angel on
Tuesday, 13th July 2004 @ 02:36:13 PM AEST
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| This was a good poem, i have seen it somewhere else on the internet, but it was a great poem |
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by brokensoul on
Friday, 23rd July 2004 @ 12:46:04 AM AEST
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| that poem was amazing it made me feel all gooey my friend read it to and cried that was so sad my godd great job |
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by jmt25607 on
Tuesday, 27th July 2004 @ 09:41:28 PM AEST
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| that poem was great keep up the writeing it was so sad but true |
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by Crypt_pixie on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 01:24:47 PM AEST
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| Yes....I to have seen it......thats copyright |
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by Xxluckie_lynnxX on
Sunday, 1st August 2004 @ 05:01:56 PM AEST
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| o lawd thats sooooo sad. and to think that can truley happen to somebody. |
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by ammalu on
Tuesday, 3rd August 2004 @ 03:26:11 AM AEST
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| So sad - let it be a 'true' lesson/ warning to such guys - so 'silly' they thinks - such 'happening' humiliates - thanks for sharing - May the 'souls' rest in peace - AMEN |
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by Solnubis on
Saturday, 14th August 2004 @ 08:13:50 AM AEST
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| Very Good and to the point. |
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by PumpkinPie on
Wednesday, 18th August 2004 @ 11:39:29 PM AEST
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Whoever did write it has a talent like no other.To be able to write such a perfect read is really something else.It got to me in an undescribable way.WOW-----------
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by alecfernadez on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 08:14:14 AM AEST
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It didnt make me cry, but I appreciate the power and brutality of it. The ending is exspecially well written, and creates a frightening real twist because it is real.
Well done!
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by inoc on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 10:23:04 AM AEST
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wonderfully written
it made me sad
yes young ones be careful
drink driving is bad bad bad
cheers! |
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by Ronald on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 12:27:40 AM AEST
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| This poem is just so sad... Really touched me a lot. Thanks for sharing. |
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by buchi on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 05:44:56 AM AEST
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They contrast the changing and perishable nature of our humanmind...."Tell Mum and Dad I'm sorry I lied,
And that it's my fault so many have died.
Oh, nurse, won't you please tell them that for me?"
The nurse just stood there-she never agree....The allegorical meaning throughout the poem, although generally well sustained, is not always so....
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 12:26:36 AM AEST
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| AW that was sad, it gave me the chills. Good write! |
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by XxdefinelifexX on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 03:46:20 PM AEST
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| i just read this and it made me cry at the end...at first i hold myself i read it again and tears started to pur down my face man this is really good...but somehow its like familiar to me... |
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 04:06:05 PM AEST
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I got this story in an email quite a while ago, but you did an excellent job making it into a poem...it did cause tears to spring up in my eyes...Super!!!
Mason |
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by ZiltzWiltz on
Monday, 8th November 2004 @ 09:05:05 PM AEST
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| when i got to the end i gasped...that is so sad. |
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by Sirena_Degana on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 10:10:45 AM AEST
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This is the best i have ever read...the most captivating...the most inspiring....and the most warning...you went into this one slowly and built suspense...very good write.....
blessed be
sirena |
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by candysears on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:08:54 PM AEST
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Very touching..
Heart breaking
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by THORN on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 06:08:26 AM AEST
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That didn't make me cry at all... I didn't like it, no offense (since so many ppl agree that it isn't original but wtf, I didn't like it anyway).
Sorry... I'm in a bad mood...
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 04:39:39 AM AEST
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| Yes, it's a sad and wonderfully written poem. But... I think I saw it in a chain letter... |
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by lonithion on
Thursday, 9th December 2004 @ 04:38:46 AM AEST
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yep, you were right. I did cry. That was very sad and moving. Hopefully people will understand the dangers.
you have done a great thing with this poem.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 07:46:41 AM AEST
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| I've gotten that email before. nice plagerism i guess : / |
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by jenipher on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 03:56:44 AM AEST
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| omg i loved that poem i like started cryen lol then when it was ur mum and dad too! its so sad ur a great writer nice job keep it up :) |
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by sunshiny on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 01:04:34 AM AEST
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| Wow. This sent shivers down my spine. Too many people drink and drive. It's sad that it takes things like this to happen to get people to realize what drinking and driving does to people. Great write! |
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by tWiStLe on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 07:32:21 PM AEST
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| As others have stated on their comments i have also read this on other sites and in e-mails.... as noticed these poems are then copyrited to you on this website... i kno my friends set poems on their accounts that aren't theirs so at the beggining comments on that particular poem they state who wrote it as they wanted to share it with the rest of the poeple on this site.... maybe just as you have done... if in this case with your further posts please state wether this is yours or not at the beginning because people are giving you credit for it... on the other hand if this is your writing... well done. |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 02:07:07 AM AEST
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Wow...This gave me goosebumps.
Amazing job. |
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by Falloftheangels on
Saturday, 25th December 2004 @ 11:56:19 AM AEST
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"Tell Mum and Dad I'm sorry I lied"
Way to contradict the content of the poem.
Maybe you should give credit where it is due
Cut and paste. Real talent right there. Keep it up and you just might win a few years in jail.
This poem came out some four years ago. It was annonymous. I doubt that whoever wrote it would appreciate you taking credit for it. |
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by pleasure_is_pain103 on
Sunday, 2nd January 2005 @ 03:04:41 PM AEST
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| i've already read this at like 8 different places too |
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by devine_xox on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:41:18 PM AEST
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| I have read this poem before many times and yes it was Anonymous. I am a member with the copyright association.Copyright is a serious violation of original work. I suggest you post an appology to save yourself before this goes too far. Thankyou. |
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by dalamar on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 09:18:19 AM AEST
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| I am trying to keep for crying because i am class but it is ture it made my cry. Nice poem. |
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by sabrina on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:50:59 PM AEST
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| Wow..amazing..simply amazing.... |
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by imnohbdy on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 05:27:25 AM AEST
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| Wow! Simply amazing perhaps the best poetic story I have read in years. Loved it from begining to end. |
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by humboldthunny17 on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 08:33:09 PM AEST
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| Did u write this? because i've seen it in emails times and times again... under anonymous. I think it was written different, but the same story, nonetheless |
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by mazeof_darkness on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 05:20:40 AM AEST
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| This is so sad but at the same time it is an amazing use of words to put together a story. Great write! |
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by 01_zanzebar on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 06:20:09 PM AEST
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i know im at the end, but this is a billiant poem, ifound it was amazing and saddening, profound and tradgic. i cant say i enjoyed it for obvios reasons, but it was certainly brilliantly done and presented. thanks for the words,
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by twisted_dreams on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 06:40:55 PM AEST
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| ive read this poem before.. you should find out who wrote it and give them credit |
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by maddie on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 10:09:10 PM AEST
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i love this poem so much it
actually brought tears to my eyes |
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by JohnAshleigh on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 06:17:29 PM AEST
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| That is so sad....I dont know what to say to it, but a very good moral. |
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by Lashing_Tongue on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 03:28:46 PM AEST
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| Yah, this made me cry alright, out of boredom.. |
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by jono on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 02:21:09 PM AEST
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| one word WOW!!! |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 10:40:34 AM AEST
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| Ick. This is like a horrible chain-mail poem. I think I've actually read it before. Not my favorite. |
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by GAMEchief on
Thursday, 11th January 2007 @ 07:00:50 PM AEST
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| This is probably my favorite poem [that's not about personal experiences]. It's... wow. (speechless) |
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by Linds on
Tuesday, 6th February 2007 @ 05:16:24 PM AEST
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oh my goodness, that is amazing.
I love it, absoloutely incredible. |
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by OctoberRain on
Saturday, 27th October 2007 @ 09:30:51 AM AEST
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I
Love
You
seriously.
this is better than "Mommy, is it far?"
this should be the #1 most read poem on this sight |
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Re: *This Will Make You Cry...*
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by roza16 on
Monday, 11th February 2008 @ 09:23:49 AM AEST
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This is an amazing poem.
Truly a sad and twisted ending that sent the message loud and clear.
Amazing! Keep it up. |
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by aly722 on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 06:05:22 AM AEST
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| this is so sad it makes me fell guilty when i lie to my parents |
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by EdgarAllenPoe on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2011 @ 11:04:54 PM AEST
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| wow that was awesome! well done. |
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by NoAlarms on
Monday, 30th January 2012 @ 10:48:54 AM AEST
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| it's true, it's quite well written, but a tad cliched? Still good, if you did write it, but it seemed to just be an attempt to play on worst fears for effect rather than substance, suggested by the title - slightly presumptuous? And I don't entirely believe it to be true, but yeah I get it. I won't lie to my parents EVER AGAIN... |
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