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~Incomplete~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
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Saturday, 9th August 2008 @ 02:51:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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~~^~~
Incomplete
Like the night skies without the stars
Empty
Like a highway without any cars
Cold and dark
Like a mansion without love and light
Desolate
Like the country roads at midnight.
Barren
Like the sands of the desert when it’s hot..
Deserted
Like the little island that time forgot.
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This is how I felt tonight
When I didn’t see you on the site.
~~^~~
Copyright ©
Jenni_K
... [
2008-08-09 14:51:49]
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 9th August 2008 @ 03:33:17 PM AEST
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| Awe, Jenni. This is so good. Go to sleep and maybe you'll meet in your dreams... |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 10th August 2008 @ 03:14:37 AM AEST
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wow this is very errily deep.. I love this poem alot.. its beautiful..
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Ambivalence on
Sunday, 10th August 2008 @ 04:25:12 AM AEST
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i can relate to this profound but sad poem(sigh). nice structure and imagery as well. you're a skilled poet...Hope that person will be there next time/all the time. take care
-K.Z. |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by LovingWhispers on
Sunday, 10th August 2008 @ 12:11:47 PM AEST
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The depth of honesty is beauitful,no matter the feelings that inspire.
You have penned well,your heart.
Much love! |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by holy on
Monday, 11th August 2008 @ 05:47:36 PM AEST
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| Dear sister, I am happy can share your mood always, great job! |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th August 2008 @ 01:07:48 PM AEST
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Beautifully deep and sad, Jenni.
.................Mike |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by ZiggyB on
Tuesday, 12th August 2008 @ 11:33:58 PM AEST
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Jenni,
This is bittersweet...hope all is well.
Beautiful writing as always.
~Stephan |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by eternalsunshine on
Wednesday, 13th August 2008 @ 12:29:01 PM AEST
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aww this is sweet
enjoyed it much
lots of love...:) |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 14th August 2008 @ 09:42:35 AM AEST
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Oh Jenni hun. Sue hugs Jen so tight. I feel your sadness. Can you imagine the night skies without any stars, or a world without love or light, Yekes!
I'm so sorry you're feeling like this dear friend. I wished I could make it all better for you sweetheart. When you become so involved with someone, it's like they become the air you need to breathe. Ah yes, I know that feeling. Chin up babe.
A sad and heart tugging write. Wishing you a rainbow of happiness to warm your heart my dear friend. I have missed you so much. Take care
love n hugs,
Sue M |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by FRANCO on
Thursday, 14th August 2008 @ 11:19:34 AM AEST
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Dear Jenni it's wonderfully written ...I hope you are complete now.
God bless you my good friend.
FRANCO. |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by deadwriter on
Thursday, 14th August 2008 @ 11:23:02 AM AEST
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With all of these friends around it is hard to think you would ever be incomplete. Great write Jenni.
Deadwriter
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Spike on
Sunday, 17th August 2008 @ 08:06:18 PM AEST
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jenni, jenni - I wouldn't be waiting for anybody on this site or any other to complete you, but I do know the feeling - and its a real kick in the guts. You captured the feeling very well.
Spike |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 21st August 2008 @ 02:07:11 PM AEST
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You took the words right out of my mouth...but you arranged them so much better than me. I can so relate to this poem. I can really feel the emotion. Very nicely done.
Thank you,
Tim |
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Re: ~Incomplete~
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by sirenofthenorth on
Thursday, 11th September 2008 @ 07:01:13 AM AEST
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Jenni,
That was...amazing, so full of emotion. Nice Job. |
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