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Neverland
Contributed by
ingeniusidiot
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Thursday, 31st July 2008 @ 11:16:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Coastal crags stand so majestically watching over sand and sea
As seagulls dance and careen upon thermals that carry them into the heavens
While a lone ship keeps time swaying upon cerulean waters
As its journey leads to its end just over the distant horizon
And the rum creates images of mermaids and monsters
All the while anchored in port
The sun repels the darkened clouds
Never seeing rain or sadness
And a single happy thought
Can carry you upon the breeze
Through a never ending sea of blue
Crooks, thieves, and pirates afraid of time slipping through their fingers
While children dance and be merry
Staying young forevermore
And to the north two stars shining brightly visible both day and night
Lead to the world of the dying
And those that have forgotten their youth
2008
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ingeniusidiot
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2008-07-31 23:16:03]
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Re: Neverland
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 31st July 2008 @ 11:43:14 PM AEST
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Wow Rich... an awesome write here...brilliant imagery...
"And the rum creates images of mermaids and monsters
All the while anchored in port"
This makes me wanna believe you were writing about our little island..lol....
Jenni
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Re: Neverland
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 01:39:35 AM AEST
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| This is awesome imagery and a very enjoyable read. I love the word choices as well, great write! |
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Re: Neverland
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by shelby on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 03:42:13 AM AEST
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Rich,
I see you got it done and how beautiful it is.
I loved the ocean and all the detail and images in this poem. Great job!
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Neverland
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by deadwriter on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 06:07:21 AM AEST
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Rich,
Fantastic piece of work here. Superb job.
Deadwriter
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Re: Neverland
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by ZiggyB on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 07:50:53 AM AEST
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Damn!!! Almost made me feel like I was there. You have some imagination there Rich.
Excellent write.
Keep em coming
~Stephan |
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Re: Neverland
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 09:17:43 AM AEST
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Rich,
Such a masterpiece of words.
Awesome write.....Mike |
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Re: Neverland
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th August 2008 @ 12:18:57 AM AEST
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Gosh, I adore the story of Peter and his shenanigans and you have breathed
life into it once again. I am simply breathless at some of the lines here. There
is a beauty in this that could be missed if read too fast, you know? I especially
like the line ..
"And the rum creates images of mermaids and monsters"
It does not segregate or curry favour to any one thing. Be warned.
Drink of this and ye shall see both Monsters and Mermaids.
A glorious fantastical write! Really enjoyable!
~ Breezy
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Re: Neverland
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by LauraMary on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 06:39:24 AM AEST
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| Incredible job. |
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Re: Neverland
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by bubkin on
Saturday, 25th July 2009 @ 02:21:11 PM AEST
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| superb ! truly great |
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Re: Neverland
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 26th June 2015 @ 03:38:22 PM AEST
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exquisite, creative and beautifully penned, it flows so
well i was surprized when i came to the last line!
hugs n' love nessa |
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