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Abstruct My Life
Contributed by
RAGEyourDREAM
on
Thursday, 31st July 2008 @ 09:48:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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Sunday morning
all alone
I'll set out to search
this world drawn out of
the picture book I read
the day before yesterday.
Outside is blinding,
Acting silly and waving my hand,
it's a simple goodbye.
I get on a bus with its paint peeling off
with an unnatural grin on my face.
And on the wall to my right side
those four words I hate are
joggled, scrambling, mocking...
look...
outside is whitening
it'll illuminate me someday
soon I really must go.
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RAGEyourDREAM
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2008-07-31 09:48:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Abstruct My Life
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 12:34:51 AM AEST (User
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A very abstract, almost ambiguous work with a modern flare. Your descriptions are excellent and your style shines through your words. A really exceptional job!
BRAVO!
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