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Needing hope
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
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Sunday, 27th July 2008 @ 01:19:19 PM in AEST
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Even though the sun is shining
it's still raining at my house
Everything is wrong
some in my family are gone
I wish tonight, some light would shine upon us all
without the darkness to cover the hope
Send us the strength so we can cope .. with what is to be
Lightning crashed down on our reality
vivid images of long ago
remember the peace and keep it close by
Don't forget to read the letter I didn't write
never lose true sight of who you really are
just hold on strong and carry your scars
I am certain that someday you will be a true star...
*Vampyress Jenni*
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Phantomvampyress
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2008-07-27 13:19:19]
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Re: Needing hope
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by Crow on
Sunday, 27th July 2008 @ 01:35:57 PM AEST
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| there are things that find a way back to us..wishing all you people the best..good write. Crow |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th July 2008 @ 02:24:15 PM AEST
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this poem is softer in it's approach,
comforting to read conveys a form
of shelter from the storm of life,
truly gradifying to read Jenn as
all your beautiful work is . . .
Ben |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 27th July 2008 @ 02:28:12 PM AEST
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A lovely write, V-Jenni..
I loved this line-->
"Lightning crashed down on our reality"
I am sure the sun will shine again soon for all..
Hugs
Jenni
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Re: Needing hope
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by NoSaint on
Sunday, 27th July 2008 @ 10:22:00 PM AEST
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sometimes it is harder to watch those around us suffer than to go through things ourselves...you shine a light here...beautifully written
Shari |
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Re: Needing hope
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by beautiful_letdowns on
Monday, 28th July 2008 @ 01:54:21 AM AEST
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| "Don't forget to read the letter I didn't write" - THAT PART JUST MAKES THE POEM FOR ME! That line was just awesome in itself because how true is this in any hard time.. you may not have meant it that way but I feel like we all have so many letters we want people to read - we want them to know how we feel about things, our thoughts - but there is no concrete letter. I just really enjoyed this, it brought a new light on a seemingly hopeless situation, yet still maintaining a melancholy tone with the slightest hint of hope. I really hope things get better on your end - but nonetheless keep using your struggles as inspiration to create art like this. Nice write! |
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Re: Needing hope
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by emystar on
Monday, 28th July 2008 @ 11:59:51 AM AEST
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Sad but beautifully written.
I'll pray for all.
Luv, huggs, prayer, blessing, hope,
emy |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 05:46:35 AM AEST
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| this is so beautifully written. i hope that everything worked out. i know it's hard to sit on the sidelines. everyone needs a little hope or at least something to believe in. |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Sparkz16 on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 09:32:42 AM AEST
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ery meaningfull i liked it alot and how you wrote this for the ones close to you very thoughtful hopefully things wrk out and thanx for the comment..keep writing
- Amanda |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th August 2008 @ 12:22:21 AM AEST
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Wow Jenni! VERY powerful. The last two stanzas are FULL
of it! (Power, I mean). I really love the line,
"Don't forget to read the letter I didn't write"
There is so much in that! It's brilliant. Excellent writing.
~ Breezy
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Re: Needing hope
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 14th August 2008 @ 11:09:07 AM AEST
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Hey Jenstar, wow, i'm so sorry it's been quite a while since I visited your pages. I have been insanely busy.
Everything aside~
Yes sadly we all go through horrible times/events in our lives, but amazingly God gives us the strength to deal with it and move on. I wish everybody peace, love and warmth to fill their hearts and wash away all the heartaches and hardships they endure.
Your work is always a delight to read dearest Jen. I hope that all is good and well with you.
huge huggers dear friend,
Sue M |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th August 2008 @ 09:15:18 AM AEST
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| This is a really beautiful poem. I truly enjoyed it! |
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Re: Needing hope
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by eeeitak on
Saturday, 30th August 2008 @ 11:04:40 AM AEST
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| This is great, the shifts in emotion and the sadness, but ending on more of a hopeful note... you are an incredible poet! |
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Re: Needing hope
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th October 2008 @ 02:59:33 PM AEST
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| I hope that you have found the strength which you asked for. This is a very strong piece! |
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Re: Needing hope
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 22nd August 2009 @ 11:47:24 PM AEST
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Don't forget to read the letter I didn't write . . .
this line just floored me, you never lose it,
such a revealing piece done with artistic
delicacy, as always Jenn, your in a class by
yourself, a one of a kind, poet, beautiful work.
Ben |
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Re: Needing hope
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 20th July 2011 @ 04:16:38 PM AEST
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hey jen, It's great to see u and hear from you.
I would have sent a private message but that's down right now. Gotta tell mick.
Any ways thanks for the read and your awesome comment. I too have more to post. looking forward for your post. huggs, luv ya,
emy |
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