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Losing A Kiss
Contributed by
wizard
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Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 12:11:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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So many chances to hold her,
But for one he does implore…
So many dances without her,
Those silent steps he does deplore.
Embracing dreams without her grasp;
A recollection of letting go.
Notes unanswered and love expelled,
Meetings canceled, he wants her so.
She needed not to change a thing…
Perfect in her every way,
Yet he was unable to see…
Until the day she slipped away.
Why did she slip? Or was she pushed?
These waking dreams shall never cease.
Her image burned into his heart;
She held on through his stark release.
Alone, wanting only her kiss…
Perhaps even a word or two,
Thrown into taunting emptiness,
He knows not what he is to do…
It seems as though he’ll wear out yet another pen…
Copyright ©
wizard
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2008-07-18 12:11:33]
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by shelby on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 12:24:43 PM AEST
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This really grips and tugs at the heart to read.
Your flow and message so utterly lovely.
Hugs for you
Michelle |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 12:34:00 PM AEST
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One can feel the longing in this beautiful poem... well done, Wiz...
Jenni |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 12:58:55 PM AEST
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Wizard with a pen. May it never run dry.
Longing and deep thought put to words in
this one. I like the way it explores what led up
to and then what could have been done
different. Very thought provoking
write........Mike |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 03:13:03 PM AEST
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I absolutely love the intensity of the wording here and you definately can feel the longing of wanting and the pain.. this is just superb.. lovely job here
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 29th July 2008 @ 07:25:37 AM AEST
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So sad but beautifully sweet.
I luv this line,
It seems as though he’ll wear out yet another pen…
I know that feeling so well.
big huggs, smiles, blessings,
emy |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by catz77 on
Monday, 4th August 2008 @ 01:39:21 AM AEST
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I'm glad I decided to read this before I got off. ^_^
Very good write as always Wizard.
But there's something about this one that stands out. To me, anyway. :D
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by eeeitak on
Monday, 1st September 2008 @ 12:06:58 PM AEST
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You are so wonderfully gifted.
Here is yet another poem of yours that
I am just in love with!
It's so tragic, and stunning at the same time.
Never stop writing, friend.
--Katie |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by LauraMary on
Wednesday, 3rd September 2008 @ 07:37:33 PM AEST
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Your words reach down to the very pit of my soul.
You have an incredible way with words.
You make tragedy into beauty with your writing.
LM |
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Re: Losing A Kiss
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 6th September 2008 @ 02:48:53 PM AEST
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This may be the twentieth time I've read this
poem, it is one of my favorites of those that
I've read from you. For some reason it draws
me back in again and again. I never really
knew what to comment that could grasp how
it makes me feel. I still don't, hence the
rambling, but I thought you should know.
Anything I could say would seem trite to me,
but I will leave you with "beautifully done".
~Jesse |
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