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Not You
Contributed by
Bubbles02
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Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 12:36:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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I hate you for what you've done to me--
something you never did see.
I seen you last night
and what I felt wasn't rigt.
Heart stopped...
Couldn't breathe...
Shaky hands...
Wanted to runaway;
didn't want to stick around to hear what you had to say.
Wanted to die,
but instead went home to cry.
Wanted to use that blade,
but on my side, I laid.
I hate you
and everything you are and do.
Don't want to see your face ever again.
I'm not ten;
I know what I want.
And it's NOT you.
Copyright ©
Bubbles02
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2008-07-18 00:36:00]
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Re: Not You
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 08:32:02 AM AEST
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wow, that was very intense.
i feel that i can relate. good write.
peace
Ravyn |
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Re: Not You
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 08:32:07 AM AEST
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wow, that was very intense.
i feel that i can relate. good write.
peace
Ravyn |
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Re: Not You
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 01:33:25 PM AEST
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Hi,
I read your write because you wanted
feedback.
This is just my opinion, take it for what it's
worth.
You have these feelings that you want to
let out, yet you are only telling a story.
Poetry uses words to express those
feelings. Keep writing but try using different word to express how you feel.
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Re: Not You
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 19th July 2008 @ 07:35:13 AM AEST
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Well you certainly have the passion for you subject matter.
I think the main thing is, believe in what you write and don't worry too much about what others think
Steve |
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Re: Not You
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by Muinanyere on
Wednesday, 13th August 2008 @ 05:05:06 PM AEST
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| This is so powerful, I have felt what you have written, this is a good one very well done |
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