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~Should You Go First~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
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Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 12:02:21 PM in AEST
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~~^~~
Should you depart before I do
And leave me all alone
I’d face this world all by myself
And walk bravely into the unknown.
I’d take a trek down Memory Lane
And recall the pleasures and joys
The happy times that we both shared
Even death cannot destroy.
I’d hear your voice whispering to me
When the ocean breezes blow
I’d know that you were by my side
Everywhere I go.
I’d feel your gentle touch
As the waves caress the shore
I’d know it had to be you
As, my body, you try to explore.
I'd see your smile within the clouds
Way up in the sky so blue.
And if you looked down below
You’d see me smiling too.
When you leave for the other side
There’s one thing I’ll ask you to do;
Save me a place close by
For soon I’ll be joining you.
~~^~~
15.07.08
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Jenni_K
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2008-07-16 12:02:21]
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 12:24:27 PM AEST
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this is very touching and i loved the ending.. This is a beautiful passionate expressive write
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 01:17:21 PM AEST
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Jen,
this is beautiful. It touched me so. Reminds me of my uncle and something my aunt said to me the other day. Incredible write.
Michelle
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 01:52:16 PM AEST
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hey jen,
I certainly hope no ones checking out any time soon.
Awesome writing.
huggs, blessings, long life,
emy |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by holy on
Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 03:10:51 PM AEST
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| Dear sister, I am so moved reading your this poem. |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by sorrowsofabrokenheart on
Wednesday, 16th July 2008 @ 03:26:04 PM AEST
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| great write, love the vibe it creats. a chearful smirk that leave the eyes a bit watery. because theres not person on earth in bit of a heart that could not relate. again an enjoyable read. |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Thursday, 17th July 2008 @ 01:50:14 AM AEST
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What a wonderfully captivating piece of pure magic this is.
Yet more testament to your poetic prowess.
Effortless to read and such a great flow to it
Great work
Steve |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th July 2008 @ 03:18:48 AM AEST
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| It's so great to get back on this site after a very long time removed and instantly come across a reminder as to why I've wanted to write in the first place. Thank you so much, this is beautiful. |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 11:00:15 AM AEST
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Oh my gosh, hun! Damn, this is so gorgeous!!!!!
I've often thought about how I would handle the loss of someone I loved dearly,
should they be the one to leave first. And I've always reached the same conclusion.
I'd be a mental case if I were to be left behind. I have never thought myself strong
enough. But wow! Your words inspire and create a power that even I could
engage! I love that about your writings. They not only touch the reader, but
become a PART of them, in a way that few can and do.
Beautiful work, hun. As always ~
*hugs you tight*
~Breezy
(OMG .. I LOVE the pic of you in the water! I want to join! It looks SO relaxing!) |
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Re: ~Should You Go First~
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by holy on
Friday, 18th July 2008 @ 02:58:05 PM AEST
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| Reading your this old poem, and waiting for your new poem...... |
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