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Waves of Anguish
Contributed by
wheels
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Saturday, 12th July 2008 @ 04:07:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I am a fool upon a sinking ship
Pirated from my heart
Taken to the storm
Where waves of anguish
Has left my beams to part
And I shall hold me to the mast
I shall feel the salt of torment about me
I shall add to it my token
I shall breath deep
The water into my lungs
And pray that Davey
Shall release my heart into her hands
And she shall release the serpent from her heart
And bathe my heart within her tears.
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2008-07-12 16:07:52]
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by beautiful_letdowns on
Saturday, 12th July 2008 @ 04:14:15 PM AEST
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| wow you really got the way you were feeling out there and sucked the reader in.. nice write, thanks for posting |
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by brew on
Sunday, 13th July 2008 @ 12:28:52 AM AEST
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Such words, with so much with in them. Sorry she wont listen with her eyes and really see. Thanks for sharing such beautiful words.
brew~ |
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by shelby on
Sunday, 13th July 2008 @ 02:18:51 AM AEST
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Shall release my heart into her hands.... profound.
Well this is simply lovely but dang sad. We need to work on getting you happy once more.
Hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th July 2008 @ 10:18:32 AM AEST
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Awesome write Kevin. Personally, I liked
the last line, as it gives hope. Thats one thing
you have, hope.....................Mike |
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by emystar on
Sunday, 13th July 2008 @ 04:41:01 PM AEST
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A very thought provoking write.
Sad but well written.
huggs,
emy
Any one as good looking as you should have more luv than they could handle.
big smiles,
emy |
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Re: Waves of Anguish
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th July 2008 @ 12:38:40 AM AEST
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What an interesting and fortuitous happenstance, that I should chance upon this
particular write on this particular morning, (P of the C -- At World's End is playing).
I love the metaphor you've crafted and the way in which you've drawn SO damn
much emotion in so few lines. It's perfect!
I adore how it 's like the sadness has entwined itself around this soul, in
a torturous chain that binds him to it. But as Mike says, there is hope,
especially in that last line. DAMN! It's so impossibly gorgeous and agonizing
at once. (Like so much of what you write!!)
Bravo, poet! Bravo!
~Breezy
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