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Flurried Thoughts
Contributed by
wizard
on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 03:31:00 AM in AEST
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Dreams haven’t passed…
Her spell’s been cast,
As angels kneel before her.
Her perfect form…
Emotions swarm,
Dreaming of what might be.
If but a kiss…
Conjuring bliss,
This curse may lose its hold.
So many days…
Too many strays,
Hollow tears make eyes burn.
The beating will stop…
She’ll stay on top,
On top of dreams forever.
Beauty so pure…
So much to endure,
How many so adore her.
A day of grace…
Lost in this chase,
Again left to wonder why.
Copyright ©
wizard
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2008-07-07 03:31:00]
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by ZiggyB on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 10:11:52 AM AEST
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Hey Wizard,
I like this very much. Very profound.
~Stephan |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 10:45:41 AM AEST
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Hey wiz,
If you wrote this about Deborah and I, you nailed it. I was "Again left to wonder why". She still haunts my dreams, day and night.
Great write my friend. I always love your work.
Mike |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by emystar on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 12:08:18 PM AEST
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Wiz,
When I read this it puts me in mind of Princess Diana.
Who ever, it's really beautifull.
Awesome, my friend.
Big huggs, smiles,
emy
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by wheels on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 01:39:20 PM AEST
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Beutiful poem wizards,
it can have a couple of interpetations, bu t to me it is the love of one beautiful to others, but no more beautiful than in our very own heart, yet not in our arms. The story of my crystal. Nice poem.
--Kevin
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by sprinter27 on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 02:21:29 PM AEST
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Really Nice. I actually had to go back and read it a couple of times to really get a thought on it. I like it when works of art make me look at them more than once: it means my attention has been caught, & i want to look deeply to find the meaning. I agree with Wheels/Kevin- it could have different meanings. Nice write, keep up the work!!
~sprints |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by Oceandreamer on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 09:37:59 PM AEST
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Awesome write!
Thanks for sharing...
~~Oceandreamer~~ |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 9th July 2008 @ 03:22:33 PM AEST
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| Very uniquely structure, and it told an interesting story of sorts as well. This was an enjoyable piece to read, well done. |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th July 2008 @ 05:51:17 AM AEST
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| The short lines seemingly left unfinished leave the reader to ponder, to finish them in their own unique way.
Adoration and fantasizing, perhaps to unhealthy depths, thats what I get out of it, but it leaves itself open to many other reader interpitations. |
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Re: Flurried Thoughts
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th September 2008 @ 02:48:58 AM AEST
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| Heart breaking... |
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