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Never Gone
Contributed by
Loende
on
Friday, 4th July 2008 @ 09:52:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Change is coming, my friends have said
The words have echoed, filled with dread
For at this time and at this place
I won’t survive through more disgrace
I take a breath but get no air
I cannot feel and dare not care
For if I do and darkness reigns
I will not live through that much pain
When I let go and set you free
It severed parts inside of me
For that to be there was a cost
A searing, empty, bleeding loss
If faced again, I’d do no less
Love not free is a bitter guest
For even now I wish you life
No matter what the final price
And though this task was mine to choose
I hope you know that it was truth
For change will come and I’ll move on
My love for you though, never gone.
Copyright ©
Loende
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2008-07-04 21:52:45]
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Re: Never Gone
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 5th July 2008 @ 01:42:16 PM AEST
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| I loved your close attention to poem structure, and your rhyming was very well done for most of the write. The themes as well were aided by the poem's pacing, I believe. Overall this was a very enjoyable write. |
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Re: Never Gone
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by Thespia on
Tuesday, 8th July 2008 @ 08:36:30 PM AEST
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Lovely emotinal poem, loved the rhyme
structure. Keep it up.
Sarah |
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Re: Never Gone
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 8th September 2008 @ 02:14:30 AM AEST
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beautifully written, so sad...
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Never Gone
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th October 2008 @ 09:09:43 PM AEST
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Beautifully written about a painful subject. Sadly, love does hurt sometimes. But I find myself quite often being amazed at how love, pain, pain, love, can inspire such wonderful poetry. Again, today, I see that wonderful poetry. Awesome job. Great flow.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep believing...it can be fun.
Tim
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Re: Never Gone
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 10:31:18 AM AEST
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a very intelligent poem with some excellent description. i like the messages it gives off as well. i particularly liked this bit:
If faced again, I’d do no less
Love not free is a bitter guest
For even now I wish you life
No matter what the final price
unbelievably good, and a great message behind it. |
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