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~Presence~
Contributed by
shelby
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Friday, 4th July 2008 @ 10:13:02 AM in AEST
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EmotionalPoetry
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~ I held the meaning of our worth~
~Still in the palm of my hand~
~I sat and let the quiet in~
~Waiting, in silence for the feeling~
~Something is amiss right now~
~Your presence has lost its grip~
~Though distance has us apart~
~I always felt you near, not now~
~The winds sigh through the tree’s~
~The rain beats upon the panes~
~Thunder stirs in the distance~
~I feel the rumble near my soul~
~ I have lost you somewhere somehow~
~ The winds have changed their course~
~I do not feel you now~
~ Somehow something seems lost~
Where are you?
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2008-07-04 10:13:02]
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Re: ~Presence~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th July 2008 @ 10:53:34 AM AEST
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Something is amiss right now~
~Your presence has lost its grip~
~Though distance has us apart~
~I always felt you near, not now~"
Ive read lines and verses that made me cry, the above makes me shiver, what an awesom statement of longing, you inflicted
a true emotion in all of its nerve ending touching mannerisums, very efficently, like the archer's bow, you've more than hit your mark. you've penatrated the source . . .
((((Michelle)))) happy 4th likewise shel . . .
hope all is well @ your end . . .
thank you also for your read and comment.
t
ake care . . .
Ben |
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Re: ~Presence~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th July 2008 @ 10:58:43 AM AEST
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Wow Michelle. This piece cries deep emotion,
enough to bring anyone to tears.
I am here for you, if you need...........Mike |
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Re: ~Presence~
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by zenith66 on
Friday, 4th July 2008 @ 11:58:03 AM AEST
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| truly a moving piece, nothing too complicated just a touching write, this is powerfull, its just so eerie how that feeling of loss is portryed, as if you just cant put your finger on it, but you know its there. somehow. someway. great writing keep it up. |
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Re: ~Presence~
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 08:26:09 PM AEST
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I know exactly what you mean by you words. I have been there quite alot recently. I have to agree with everyone though in saying that this is a deeply emotional and moving piece. However sad it may be it is nonetheless very beautiful.
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Re: ~Presence~
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by Crow on
Thursday, 10th July 2008 @ 04:25:15 PM AEST
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I have heard these words through the screaming..the stones that held me down.
always know I am with you now, always know I am with you if I have fallin" All the pretty things you can imagine I have seen.
and the longing is only for your hand my friend. I`ll love you through it all. Crow |
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