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The Silk About My Heart
Contributed by
wheels
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Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 03:11:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I need to get free
This web of silk
Spun so well
Holding me in misery
I need to feel the wind tearing loose the cobs
To feel the joy
The peace of nature
Washing cross my feet the water
Flowing as I wander in the stream
To dream again
Without worry
Of night mares…
…of you
…of me without you
To swim again in a pool, clear and cool
Christened among the fishes
Reborn to life, where
Hope seeks the horizon
Yet, content among the fishes
Swimming for the sake
The sun upon the banks
Warming there in wait
Casting off the spiders
Tearing at my heart
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wheels
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2008-07-01 15:11:15]
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Re: The Silk About My Heart
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 09:19:19 PM AEST
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Well done!! I loved your use of metaphors in this...
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Re: The Silk About My Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 09:48:33 PM AEST
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| May the water soon wash you clean for there are many fish still left in the sea. Great write Kevin..........Mike |
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Re: The Silk About My Heart
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 10:02:36 PM AEST
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Omigosh! This metaphor was wonderfully done.
The words you chose were so perfectly emotive, taking the reader from
the heartache of being bound, to the freedom of breaking those binds and
waking to a "newness" of life. A very cleansing write.
Though this may still be a struggle for you, the power you are claiming in
your writes will convince your heart eventually that you are and WILL be
okay. :)
This was a wonderful post!
~Breezy
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Re: The Silk About My Heart
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2008 @ 03:32:15 AM AEST
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Kevin,
This turned out so well. I am glad I got to see the finished poem. Incredible write, the webs are so fitting with this and what we had been talking about.
Sorry about lastnight lol little bird flew ROFLMAO
damn thing!
Hugsssss
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Re: The Silk About My Heart
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by brew on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2008 @ 04:31:25 AM AEST
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Well this is a in~the~moment....Lots better than mine.! I do hope the water takes you to a whole differ part of the ocean, or maybe the lake. There are many , many, many fish to explore......You are a good writer, and writing straight from the heart are MY kinds of writes...always.
brew~ |
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