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Behind
Contributed by
lucyc
on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 06:18:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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You gave me an inch,
and i took a mile.
You gave me the Sun,
and i took the whole sky.
I took what was yours and forgot what was mine,
no wonder why now you've left me behind.
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lucyc
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2008-07-01 06:18:11] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Behind
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 06:29:02 AM AEST (User
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Ouch!!
I enjoyed this.. I thought it flowed well except maybe the last line.....
"no wonder why now you've left me behind."
I would have changed the placement of the word 'now'...to read--->
no wonder why you've now left me behind.
(just my opinion)...
Welcome to YPDC... hope you enjoy it here as much as we all do...
Jenni
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