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A BEAUTIFUL FACE
Contributed by
Brian_K_Palmer
on
Saturday, 15th March 2003 @ 03:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I moved to this town
To get rid of this frown;
From the look on my face
I must need a change of pace.
As I pulled into town,
I took a good look around.
At this small little place
That put an instant smile on my face.
I knew I was home
But I was still all alone;
So I found a nice bar
That was not very far.
It was comfortable place,
Smiles on every ones face.
And I seemed to fit in
When they all gave me a grin.
I’ve since made lots of friends,
Both women and men;
Some young and some old,
Some scary some bold.
Then from a far,
You walked into the bar.
Right out of the blue
My eyes first saw you.
With flowing fabulous hair
Like wild flowers in the summer’s air.
Sparkling eyes, such a beautiful face
A breathtaking smile in this small little place.
So where have you been
With that sweet little grin?
With sparkles on your face
That make my heart race.
As you walked by
I just tried to say hi,
But my throat got a lump
And my heart went “THUMP! THUMP!”
My knees got weak
As I attempted to speak,
And my head started to spin;
All I could do was just grin.
I tried to recover
From the spell I was under
And I glanced up to see
If she was still looking at me.
To my wondrous surprise
There were those eyes.
With a look that was so sweet,
I knew we must meet.
My life felt so right
On that warm summer’s night,
I knew you must be
The woman for me.
As you gave me a stare,
I damn near fell out of my chair.
As your gaze came across,
I knew my heart was lost.
© 2001 Brian Palmer
Copyright ©
Brian_K_Palmer
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2003-03-15 15:40:00]
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th March 2003 @ 04:30:29 AM AEST
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Yeah... good! I think you are having difficulty with rhyming. The word GRIN appears loads.. maybe you could have incorporated sin, win, kin, din, anythin other than repearting grin over because (personal opinion) a poem loses a lot of natural flow if you repeat the same word a lot.
Good work all the same
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by harmoni on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 02:23:51 PM AEST
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| A NICE POEM |
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by CarrieLynn on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 03:43:36 PM AEST
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| aww its like a mini fairy tale... lol but i liked it... |
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by Seans_Girl on
Saturday, 5th June 2004 @ 10:37:23 PM AEST
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| That poem is so sweet! |
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by JacobsKK on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 08:26:27 PM AEST
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| Other than a few rhyming flaws, this poem is awesome. ;-) |
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by lovestruck on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 12:57:14 PM AEST
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| i loved this poem! totaly love at first sight! lol how cute! |
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Re: A BEAUTIFUL FACE
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by MsCrys on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 08:12:49 PM AEST
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| Loved it! It definitely put a smile on my face...better yet, a grin! |
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