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Raining In My Heart
Contributed by
Jenni_K
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Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 06:29:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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~~^~~
It's raining heavily in my heart,
Ever since we've been apart.
The sun no longer shines for me,
As I sit and stare at the wide open sea.
The sea that separates us by so many miles
The sea that once brought us so many smiles.
We used to sail the high seas together...
Enjoyed it both in the lightning and the thunder.
We'd sail around the islands so grand,
Never caring if we ever again touched land.
Until that fateful day, when I looked into your eyes..
As we both said our own silent goodbyes...
Ten years ago you went to your watery grave,
Every ounce of strength that day I gave,
I tried my best to save you from your death,
Now all I have today is great regret.
We should not have tempted fate that morn,
We should have stayed at home and watched the storm.
Today, all I hear is the thunder from within me,
As I think of you lying there under the sea.
I now sit all alone on the sea-shore,
Not daring to venture on a boat anymore.
Trying to shelter myself from my tears,
As I think of all the wasted years.
The years we could have still been together,
If only we had been as tough as leather.
Instead we both turned soft and opted to sail..
That day my entire body went pale.
Now, the sun no longer shines for me,
It's raining heavily in my heart, you see.
~~^~~
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Jenni_K
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2008-06-20 06:29:06]
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by shelby on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 06:32:50 AM AEST
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Oh Jenni,
this is heart breaking, written with the touch only you have. I can feel the sorrow and pain in this write.
You must tell me more about this event when you feel ready. I am ready to listen.
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by lostrelic on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 06:35:06 AM AEST
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Its a hard story to read let alone live death is always hard but living to only keep his memory is so much more some stories really don't have happy endings i know about stories i hope you raise your head high everyday and smile we have to live and that means moving on i was already ready for a life of being alone
lovely write
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by safetyinnumbers on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 06:36:36 AM AEST
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A sad and heartfelt poem....nice work...Anthony |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by emystar on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 07:28:48 AM AEST
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jen this is so sad but well written.
Hang tuff, girlfriend.
Luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by deadwriter on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 07:21:13 PM AEST
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Such a sad write. The pain is cleary visible.
Deadwriter
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by kelly_may on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 08:39:58 PM AEST
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| this poem was straight from your heart and it ryemd really well |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by ingeniusidiot on
Saturday, 21st June 2008 @ 12:14:52 AM AEST
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I have to agree with so many others...this is truly heartbreaking and I am sorry for your loss. Sometimes writing help but sometime brings truth and regrets into the light so we have to face them head on...You have so many shoulders here to cry on...once again I am so very sorry.
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st June 2008 @ 05:33:47 PM AEST
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| This piece is just crushing to the heart, yet reads so beautifully. I am sorry for your loss as it reads of such tragedy and wish you only happiness in the future............Mike |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by lovely_poet on
Sunday, 22nd June 2008 @ 11:01:15 AM AEST
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| really very toching |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by eternalsunshine on
Wednesday, 25th June 2008 @ 08:23:30 AM AEST
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a wonderful write...sad but with a great flow of words...
love, peace and happiness ;) |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th June 2008 @ 02:12:10 AM AEST
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| A beautiful piece Jenni, sad yes but so well crafted. It draws the reader in... |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by GreenEves16 on
Monday, 30th June 2008 @ 12:34:15 PM AEST
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| very.......well written i love the way you put feeling into this poem, a true poet |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by ZiggyB on
Monday, 30th June 2008 @ 10:13:01 PM AEST
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Jenni,
This is sad....but you write it beautifully.
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by calebcrain on
Friday, 1st August 2008 @ 03:01:36 PM AEST
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this poem is very sad and made me think of and apreciate what i have in the way of loved ones
loved your poem |
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Re: Raining In My Heart
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by MemeCaroline on
Monday, 20th October 2008 @ 10:17:28 AM AEST
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| This poem does pull the reader in. There is alot of emotion that comes through. A wave of sadness blankets the reader. Is this based on a true story? It reads like it is and if it is not, it is very convincing to the reader. If it is true, my condolences. I have a poem that was written based on the death of my first husband and finding new love through God. You might find it interesting to read. And again thanks for such kind comments for the poem you read of mine (Shaina). Your haikus are lovely too. |
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