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MONTHLY DUE
Contributed by
accurate
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Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 03:47:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
happypoetry
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my mind wades back
to almost nine yrs in hope
where i dreamt mostly of love
a sinking me in a lovely hand
by the end of each month
i find my self payin dues
i mean heavy duty dues
its not my fault i went out wit you
no one can hold me from our glitter
of love hope and joy
the bright sun will always shine
please 4giv me i cldnt be ur fool
i know you luved me
i know you cared
but how come evry month
i payhard earned monthly dues
dont give me dat impression
you a very charmin lady
money is not ur problem
but stilll i pay monthly dues.
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2008-06-14 03:47:15]
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Re: MONTHLY DUE
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by shelby on
Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 05:19:39 AM AEST
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You have written a lovely poem with a sweetness to it.
The only thing that bothers me a bit with it is the fact of the slang, it detracts from the write.
4giv cldnt ur for a few examples. To me it has its place but not in such a beautiful poem.
Nice write
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Re: MONTHLY DUE
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by accurate on
Thursday, 19th June 2008 @ 03:25:36 AM AEST
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cool poem, i luv the rythm in it
but try 2 follow the rules k. nice poem.
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