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Torrid and deep
Contributed by
kwg
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Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 02:11:33 AM in AEST
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by Kyle
The earth swells and opens to swallow me whole
now underground it is time to pay the ferryman his toll
My acquiescence leads my soul to be surrendered, at the end of this test
horrible things I see and feel when I rest
at night my sense of loss does prevail
but it is all nothing compared to waking life
at the mercy of my travail
It could be silent and hard to see
Or too torrid and too sad to stay hidden inside of me
It will all bleed out onto the paper eventually
But doomed to be longing for you I will always be
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kwg
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2008-06-14 02:11:33]
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Re: Torrid and deep
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by screwge on
Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 03:15:38 AM AEST
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| Very poignant, very sophisticated. Like the line "Or too torrid and too sad to stay hidden inside of me." This poem has such a definite path, which stands out in contrast to the equivocation it conveys. I really like that dynamic. |
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Re: Torrid and deep
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by Sena on
Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 06:47:32 AM AEST
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Nice write. I can relate to it very well, especially the last line. Thanks for sharing, I'll be sure to read up on more of your works.
Peace,
Sena |
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Re: Torrid and deep
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by kwg on
Saturday, 14th June 2008 @ 08:44:16 AM AEST
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| i've never written before, im in such a horrible place right now, i started doing this as an effort to find a new outlet of sorts to help me through i'm glad you like it and dont laugh at me like I thought ppl would |
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