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~A Storm is Brewing~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
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Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 07:23:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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~~^~~
A storm is brewing...
I can feel the sudden chills.
The winds are picking up speed,
The rains have started pouring.
Down from the darkened clouds, they fall,
Onto these shoulders of mine.
I can see the signs...
I must heed the warning.
We have choices to make.
Either get out of the open
Or prepare to stand the consequences.
My choice I have already made.
I’ve got to find a safe haven.
I'm no longer prepared to fight,
My spirit has fallen short.
My tears now mingle with the raindrops.
I have lost!
I am lost!
~~^~~
05.06.08
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Jenni_K
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2008-06-06 07:23:53]
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by shelby on
Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 07:33:56 AM AEST
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Jen,
this pains me so to read. The ending is so profound.
I have been feeling the have lost and am lost for some time now but I know am not lost just finding a new path.
Are you going to be ok?? Need to chat pm me
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 08:44:54 AM AEST
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wow i love how you convey your hurt feelings into comparison of a storm on the way.. this has such great passionate expresion of being lost and pain in it.. its just marvelous
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by deadwriter on
Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 04:59:06 PM AEST
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I have seen you survive storms before. Each one is a single battle that will be won. Stand tall, support is there for you.
Deadwriter
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by Spike on
Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 05:19:13 PM AEST
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Jenni,
an apt use of the weather metaphor for personal foreboding and troubles. Strong and explicit in its conveyance of feelings and the actions that result.
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by Chrissylee on
Friday, 6th June 2008 @ 07:51:39 PM AEST
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| heed the warning Jen take shelter where it feels safe, as always with your words a beautiful heart felt poem, hope you get everything sorted. |
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Re: ~A Storm is Brewing~
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 7th June 2008 @ 01:14:32 AM AEST
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Is it ironic to think that our low ebbs often provide fuel for our thoughts in poetry.
You have produced another wondrous piece.
I hope that soon everyhing becomes a little easier to bear
Steve |
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