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Feels like a pretensed love

Contributed by HiddenPhase on Thursday, 5th June 2008 @ 12:24:36 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

Everything Between me and you is and alwaysz & has been pretense.
And i know in my heart nothing will ever chnage.
so why confront you or complain?
about the path i choose to take.
On this journey that will never end
cos ive fallin in love with u
also knowen as the wrong man

You broke my heart many times before
Its never gonna be full..
bcos you'll cheat on me tons more
but ill hav u know ur not onlii cheating on me but also ur unborn son
N when hurt me feels it too..
and trust me it feels liike a gun..
bein blowen right by your ear..
n forreal its hard too thiink or hear
about anything else das near.

its funny cos i know things will never change
and they always say some things r meant to stay tha same
but why was i put on this path?
oh yah..it was my choice cos if it werent our relationsip would have already bin done.

you never stop hurting me and i dont understand.
how my love for you grows stronger n i can never withstand.
you physically and emotionally bruised mi soul.
why do u play such a heartless role?
im okay but i fear for mi son.
will you do tha same and hurt my little one?

If you try thats where it'll end.
Even if i diie trying i will fend..
for tha angel i have brought in this world..
yes im talking about my hansom little male.

Copyright © HiddenPhase ... [ 2008-06-05 00:24:36]
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Re: Feels like a pretensed love (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Thursday, 5th June 2008 @ 01:26:44 AM AEST
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I found the write nice in its emotion and context yet words like bcos mi instead of my u instead of you really take's away from the write as a poem.

It is easy to use shortcuts when typing a text message but it doesn't fit into poetry.

Other than that clean up a little and you do write well.

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