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Shattered
Contributed by
karoody
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Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 02:00:00 PM in AEST
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I woke up this morning
And punched the mirror in disgust
I hated where I was
But now I hate what I've become
Because of my selfishness-
Because of my stubborn ignorance-
I lost it all,
Threw it all away
Now I can't go back.
The peaceful child I once was is gone
My head swims,
Refusing to let me understand
So I'll just sit here
Knowing it's out of my hands
And I can't go back...
Copyright ©
karoody
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2003-03-14 14:00:00]
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Re: Shattered
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by roisin on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 04:15:16 PM AEST
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recriminations, regrets, self disgust...yes, I know I've been there, and revisited often...but ..the inner child does remain within ourselves, although at times asleep, she is quite easily awakened.....
rosie
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Re: Shattered
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by MoonlitAngel on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 04:35:18 PM AEST
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Yep, can definitely relate. Selfish and stubborn? Yep, that's me. Great poem! Blessed be,
~ Moonlit Angel |
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Re: Shattered
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 06:14:14 PM AEST
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Another good write, Kara..enjoyed this..and can relate..
Jenni |
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Re: Shattered
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by exiled on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 07:36:58 PM AEST
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| i really really like this. and can really relate |
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Re: Shattered
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 09:01:11 PM AEST
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Relate I can, Enjoy I did. Whether or not u want some advice on this poem I am going to give u some. I think u should have drawn out this poem longer. Maybe described what u were feeling In any case very strongly written poem I love the feelings u portray in this poem. Great poem.
Joel |
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Re: Shattered
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by karoody on
Friday, 14th March 2003 @ 11:41:08 PM AEST
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| wow! thanks all of you. iwasn't happy with the poem but posted anyway cause i needed to clear my head some. joel, thank you for the ideas. i started a forum requesting input on improvement. |
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Re: Shattered
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by venkat on
Saturday, 15th March 2003 @ 02:30:08 AM AEST
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| Poor mirror, I think you might have thrown your anger& ignorence out along with the shattered pieces. well done. thats a wise act.. .. venkat |
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Re: Shattered
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by LadyDama on
Sunday, 16th March 2003 @ 03:23:15 AM AEST
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| roison and venkat's comments best reflect how i feel about this poem... you are very talented, dear kara... blessings to you... |
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Re: Shattered
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by Feelin_Like_A_SadFellow on
Wednesday, 19th March 2003 @ 04:43:40 PM AEST
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| i read my journey first but i think they are both on equal levels they share the same emotion and depth that you had |
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Re: Shattered
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by wyrd_faerie on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 03:26:46 PM AEST
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| wow...this is so like me...i have turned over the mirrors in my room because i hate what i am...beautifully written... |
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