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The Smoke Keeps Rising…
Contributed by
alibof10
on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 11:43:04 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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The smoke keeps rising
As my heart burns
The smoke keeps rising
As my emotions erupt
The smoke keeps rising
As my feelings melt
The smoke keeps rising
As my inner-self evaporates
The smoke keeps rising
As my senses disappear
The smoke keeps rising
As my heart breaks
The smoke keeps rising
As my soul escapes
The smoke keeps rising
As I let go
The smoke keeps rising
As I try to forget
The smoke keeps rising
As I put out my cigarette…
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alibof10
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2008-05-25 11:43:04]
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Re: The Smoke Keeps Rising…
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by shelby on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 02:27:18 PM AEST
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I loved this and the very end made me smile. Poof we are all up in smoke.
Great job with this
Michelle |
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Re: The Smoke Keeps Rising…
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by ratty on
Friday, 30th May 2008 @ 12:43:02 PM AEST
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| Yeah, the last line was good for a nice smile.....Liked it.... |
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Re: The Smoke Keeps Rising…
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by BRIDGI on
Sunday, 15th June 2008 @ 12:03:29 AM AEST
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| wow i love it...it leads us on to think maybe your trying to commit suicide...but yeah your showing...that smoking is like your get away like it helps your forget... |
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