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the jouney
Contributed by
SilverRain
on
Saturday, 24th May 2008 @ 07:51:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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As I walk
I feel the hot sand under my bare feet
crumbling with every step I take
creeping up my legs
flowing along the curves of my body
until it reach my mouth
I feel it between my teeth
taste it draining the little saliva I have left
It enters me
absorbing my last breath
until I form part of the vastness of the desert
Conformed
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SilverRain
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2008-05-24 19:51:56]
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Re: the jouney
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by catz77 on
Saturday, 24th May 2008 @ 08:04:09 PM AEST
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Good write. I liked the imagery.
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Re: the jouney
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 01:51:51 AM AEST
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Good visuals...
Jenni |
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Re: the jouney
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 04:08:42 AM AEST
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| you are absolutely right, the journey always does change you. |
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