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Contributed by
arijadna77
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Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 05:19:30 AM in AEST
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With silver blade ripped womb
In red can is crying
And they
They are laughing
Don’t understand pain and fear of wounded deer
Black clouds are passing the sun
Which is trying to ripped them and come to that poor being
Everything’s red even he’s eyes
Cold blade incises for a hundredth time
Deeper
And deeper
Into the flesh
Red drops came down to a white surface
And he opened he’s eyes
Everything was red
Even he’s eyes
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2008-05-22 05:19:30]
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Re: no title
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by Muinanyere on
Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 07:43:06 AM AEST
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| I really liked this, especially your descriptions. |
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by shelby on
Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 08:59:47 AM AEST
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whew this is spooky gave me chills it is strong in detail and images .
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by safetyinnumbers on
Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 11:10:09 AM AEST
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Interesting piece....'baby and pain' are two things that come into my head and 'blood'.....nice imagery, very strong and effective.....nice work again...... |
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Re: no title
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by Arijadna77 on
Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 04:02:24 PM AEST
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| Actually,this was written when i was in medical school,watching an abortion.Thats IS explanation....unfortunately... |
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by SilverRain on
Thursday, 22nd May 2008 @ 10:42:49 PM AEST
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You take your reader by the heart and pull them along with your words. A very touching and heart wrenching piece. Well done.
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