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My Agony
Contributed by
jesusofholland
on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 02:35:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She touches flame to candle
With patience and great care
It flickers, dances through dim room
And shines upon her hair
Seductive strut and fluid hips
Are locked onto my glare
Her lips so sultry, wanton, soft
Belie her skeptics stare
So close she brings her face
But only drapes silk hair
Then lightly like butterfly's wing
Come kisses I hardly bear
The way she teases me
I tell her it's unfair
The agony she brings to me
I know she will not spare
And when she does submit
To me what she will dare
I wake in bed, cold with sweat
She's not; never will be there
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Re: My Agony
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by shelby on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 03:36:08 PM AEST
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Oh my this is dreamy, beautiful flow...... Romantic soft and sensual then the twist ending..... Awesome work!
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Re: My Agony
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 10:02:41 PM AEST
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OH wow! What a tantalizing but agonizing sequence!! Dreams can be so
torturous no matter how beautifully they begin. This was gorgeously relentless.
So vivid!
Wonderful write. Enjoyed it immensely.
~Breezy |
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Re: My Agony
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by Alex23 on
Friday, 2nd May 2008 @ 05:41:22 AM AEST
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wow. the comments above me said it all.
this had a great flow, and nice use of diction |
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Re: My Agony
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 2nd May 2008 @ 06:47:05 AM AEST
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Quite a seductive write... magnificently written...
Jenni |
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