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thank you
Contributed by
jillian_phan
on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 03:16:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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thank you..
I need a real live nigga
A real man from the start.
..knows how to take the pressure
When the heat is on..
..speaks their mind…
..sheds light on the heart.
I don’t need no man ..
..simple as said.
..don’t want a man
To wine and dine me
I want a man
That will stand tall beside me..
Don’t want no playa *****..
The games and the fun..
I want a man that can say
My love, my heart you just won..
_____
Now real talk.. I was never gaming you
Gaming me.. of course that is something your going to do..
.. if I’m not prowling around.. trying to find some new ground..
Then best believe that is the way it is.
But now I know and now I see..
That there ain’t funna ever be..
.. a you and me..
Now that I see I can stay standing tall..
Thank the lord for not letting me fall..
Because only he knows
..what I went through from the heart..
I am disappointed..
I saw potential..
But now I know..
This will be something to never start..
..to think I had almost let down my guard.
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jillian_phan
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2008-05-01 03:16:11]
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Re: thank you
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by BornReckless on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 04:37:17 AM AEST
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| The term "nigga" should be never be used. That's pure ignorance and quite offensive. Second of all this sounds like a really bad rap song. Nice try tho. |
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Re: thank you
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by ZiggyB on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 10:23:42 PM AEST
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You have succeeded in turning your readers off with your very first stanza.
It portrays you are both ignorant and offensive.
Truly hurt your poem. |
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