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~Empty World~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
on
Wednesday, 30th April 2008 @ 03:02:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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~~*~~
If you could take a photo
Deep within her soul
You’d see the emptiness that lies within
That deep abysmal hole.
You’d look at the bright smiles
That grace each picture she takes.
But very few will ever know
The smiles are nothing but fake.
On the surface she appears to be joyful
She shares the happiness of all.
No one must know of her pain
She needs to stand tall.
No one knows those deep, dark thoughts
That resides within her head.
She lives in a world of fantasy,
As she closes her eyes in bed.
She wishes things could be different
But fate dictates otherwise.
No one must ever discover
The tears that she cries.
~~*~~
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Jenni_K
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2008-04-30 15:02:42]
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Re: ~Empty World~
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by soapy on
Wednesday, 30th April 2008 @ 07:14:12 PM AEST
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| Jenni-k, You have put a poem full of suffering and hiding away from reality. I trust that this is just a poem and not something real. It hurts to read of someones losing love their love and faith. soapy. |
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Re: ~Empty World~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th April 2008 @ 10:02:34 PM AEST
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Oh Jenni, how painful! What a devastating write. I especially felt
the line "As she closes her eyes in bed". Something about the night
time that magnifies anguish, you know? And lying wide awake in bed,
with only thoughts for company; trying so desperately to sleep and
put those thoughts to rest can really be a painful experience.
Loved the whole piece! It's very emotive.
Hope all is well with you. ^_^
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: ~Empty World~
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by shelby on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 07:24:44 AM AEST
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Touching write my sweet Jen.
If you need to talk you know I am here.
Oh yes I mirror Rox on this one the night can bring these thoughts making us stir and keeping us from sleep. I know this well.....
Hugsssssssssssssssss
Michelle |
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Re: ~Empty World~
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by Anesthetic on
Thursday, 1st May 2008 @ 08:17:19 AM AEST
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Deep emotions your tapping there. Even in the darkness of it all at lest you have a small grasp on who you are behind it all. Life is harsh dont let go of yourself.
Keep up the good work
~Charli~ |
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Re: ~Empty World~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 01:16:57 PM AEST
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| hidden sadness, the scourge of many a human being. perfectly described in this great poem here. |
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