|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
~One Night With You~
Contributed by
Jenni_K
on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 11:27:38 AM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
|
If I could have one night with you,
Here is exactly what I'd like to do.
I'd cook you a meal and make sure you ate it,
Even if I had to feed you bit by bit.
No 'take-out' for you tonight, I'd say,
Right at this table is where you'd stay.
I'd make you a large cuppa, so fine and hot,
Don't worry, I won't put you on the spot.
Now while we let our meal digest,
We'll listen to music at its best.
Sipping coffee as we often do online,
Knowing that tonight, you're gonna be mine.
I'd invite you to take a stroll with me,
Along my beach of sheer tranquility.
We'd walk together, hand in hand,
Quietly enjoying the cool, white sand.
Softly, we'd chat the night away,
Till the dawn brings a brand new day.
We'd watch the sun rise as we sit on the beach,
My head on your shoulder, hands within your reach.
So content and happy I'd be to just sit there
Knowing we enjoy all that we share.
Yes, if I could have just one night with you,
I'd sneak myself just one little kiss too. :->
Copyright ©
Jenni_K
... [
2008-04-28 11:27:38]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by jesusofholland on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 02:17:16 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very sweet. I could sure use that large cuppa love!
Very enjoyable, and yes, fun. |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 02:33:57 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Girlfriend, I luv it when you play write.
Awesome writing.
Awespme masterpeice that many can relate to.
Big huggs, smiles, just one nite,
emy
|
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by Beau2163 on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 03:17:44 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I like it. And I need a girl like that... mainly because I cannot cook. |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by high_on_duct_tape on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 03:25:30 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Very sweet poem. Certain lines, like "Knowing that we enjoy all that we do share," seem a bit awkwardly constructed to fit inside the poem, but overall it still works. It's works out quite nicely.
Solomon |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by deadwriter on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 09:52:26 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Great write. One that makes you smile.
Deadwriter
|
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by jerseysue on
Tuesday, 29th April 2008 @ 09:21:38 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I like this very much, its sentimental and sweet. Well done. Sue x |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by owkenny on
Monday, 19th May 2008 @ 02:19:18 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| uber mushi but thats ok i guess |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by jsringo on
Saturday, 24th May 2008 @ 01:15:39 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I did find my way here, I should have more faith in myself :)
I like this poem. First of all I love poems that rhyme and you do that very well. I like how your lines flow easily and gracefully. No stumbling block words in the middle that stop the flow of a sentence before the reader reaches the end. Content of the story is also very good, I could not wait to read what would happen as the poem progressed. All in all well done Jenni!!! Wayne - jsringo - The knight |
|
|
Re: ~One Night With You~
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2008 @ 01:12:23 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| very upbeat and happy, it made me smile, good job! |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
