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Million miles away
Contributed by
shelby
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Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 01:54:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
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One world spins round and round
though the scene does not fit the game.
Like the rivers wild and free
there is a ripple just the same.
In the night the thoughts arrive
and stumble over themselves.
Maybe words strewn on blue paper
searching for the middle truth.
So it goes drifting with the wind
thoughts and deeds never connect
lost to sullen moments again
million miles away, it ends.
No meeting in the middle
the ground shakes each time we meet
like the earthquake underground
rocking all off their feet.
Write it down on shades of blue paper.
Ink sealed with a kiss of lipstick red.
Faint gaze up to the skies above
million miles away begins again.
Copyright ©
shelby
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Re: Million miles away
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by Lenny_Gazbowski on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 03:12:44 PM AEST
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excellent poetry - captivating.
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Re: Million miles away
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by soapy on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 04:56:23 PM AEST
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| Life is a circle, all modes return. nothing is ever a million miles away. Today's love is yesteryears wanting and tomorrows yearning. Children show this pattern year after year with the games played in the school playground. no I think not a million miles away, more on one's own back garden. soapy. |
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Re: Million miles away
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by FRANCO on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 06:23:53 PM AEST
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Well written with a graceful flow of words., specially the last stanza that says it all.
Great work my friend.
Thank you for sharing
FRANCO. |
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Re: Million miles away
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 06:32:02 PM AEST
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Well Shelby another good write its been a long time sense I've been on this site but its nice to see your still writing. I really liked this stanza the best it just flows really well and speaks to me.
No meeting in the middle
the ground shakes each time we meet
like the earthquake underground
rocking all off their feet.
I'm back in Iraq again been here now for 7 months but I hope things are going good for you take care and keep writing....Steve |
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Re: Million miles away
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by Spike on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 08:14:18 PM AEST
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Michelle,
captivating indeed, and bittersweet, beautiful, and contemplative. Elusive on one level, yet familiar all the same.
Spike |
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Re: Million miles away
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 10:32:37 PM AEST
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Michelle,
somehow this piece feels like a bit of lost time,
trying desperately to be found. There is a familiarity in
this I cannot seem to escape. It's almost a comfort in a
melancholic sort of way.
Beautifully written, hun, as always.
A soft caress across the heart, this is.
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: Million miles away
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by ZiggyB on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 11:33:29 PM AEST
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Michelle,
I like it. Has a soft, subtle power to it...if that makes any sense.
Good write.
~Stephan |
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Re: Million miles away
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by Poetic_Punk on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 07:44:11 AM AEST
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| Great write shelby, i am never dissapointed by your writing |
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Re: Million miles away
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by deadwriter on
Monday, 28th April 2008 @ 11:22:09 AM AEST
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I always knew you had a powerful soul. Great write Shelby.
Deadwriter
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