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Theres this person...
Contributed by
liamleash
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Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 11:00:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Theres this girl i know.
Shes not very tall.
But she's bigger then this world will ever be.
Carrying a million things at once.
Heavier then the weight on atlas' back.
Shes happier then any one i know.
But inside she has a million things going on.
Shes one of the greatest people i know.
She's going to make an impact on the world.
I can tell looking at her she's wiser then anyone twice her age.
Destined to travel the earth.
Anyone who meets her will be lucky to meet an angel on earth.
At times i know you feel alone but your not.
At times i know you need someone there.
And this is a poem to say i am there.
As are you for me.
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Re: Theres this person...
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by ferasdour on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 12:58:05 PM AEST
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I use to now a chick like this.
she when out with an older guy (as they all tend to do), she wound up becomeing so engulfed in the way she had become accustom by this point that she stop realizing things to be wrong, she changed, and with that, the almost other-worldly presance she had fled from her.
she was smart, by this point in time, she is mearly smarter than most; while being just the same. they only care for themselves and those who can have an effect on them.
but then, i supose i've said too much given the fact that i didn't even congradulate you on this write.
but, i did like it dispite thoughts of people i know. ^_^ hehehe. |
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Re: Theres this person...
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by Muhammadshanazar on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 01:06:20 PM AEST
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The poem is a fine description of a girl, (Perhaps it is the poetess herself), Whoever she is, she is a promising girl not a load on the earth but carries the load.
If you donot mind here are some minor mistakes, pleasemake the correct, the poem will exert deeper impacts.
There's this girl I know.
She's not very tall.
But she's bigger than this world will ever be,
Carrying a million things at once.
Heavier than the weight on Atlas' back.
She's happier than any one I know.
But inside she has a million things going on.
She's one of the greatest people I know.
She's going to make an impact on the world.
I can tell looking at her she's wiser than anyone twice her age.
Destined to travel the earth.
Anyone who meets her will be lucky to meet an angel on the earth.
At times I know you feel alone but your not.
At times I know you need someone there.
And this is a poem to say I am there.
As you are for me.
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