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Don’t listen to the angels
Contributed by
safetyinnumbers
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Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 05:48:54 PM in AEST
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Don’t listen to the angels
they only want to hurt you
to cause you pain and delay
again and again
Don’t listen to the angels
they speak things high and hopeful
but they are the ones
that daily betray us
with words so sweet and neat
They forgive us, but condemn us
and allow us to live in distant dreams
and all seems and seems and seems
and then we die
and then we sleep
Don’t listen to the angels
they are a limited dream
they seem to comfort
but they cannot feel or see
They are what I call
a delayed effect that seems suspect
they are a nightmare in three
in three dimensions it seems
Revolving in our space
in the space of our minds
and flowing in our hearts
to make us follow blind
To follow blind and see
What we forever want to see.
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Re: Don’t listen to the angels
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by JerryKantrell on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 01:00:11 AM AEST
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Hmmm, I see that you talk about the irony in the Dichotomy of good and evil, nice subject matter, closely mirrors what I too feel, however would have loved it more if you'd have made it scan :)
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Re: Don’t listen to the angels
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by MissTeenSuicide on
Tuesday, 29th April 2008 @ 02:38:37 AM AEST
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It's a nice write, nice topic, nice feeling, though I do think you could "soften the edges" a bit.
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Re: Don’t listen to the angels
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 10th May 2008 @ 04:42:44 AM AEST
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Well I'm not sure how religious this is, but I find it ironic that you hit the nail on the head as to how Christianity has really warped the image of the angel into a sign of 'hope' and all that, when in fact the angel was originally all that you've stated here.
Aside from that little note, I found this to be a very unique write, something you don't see everyday and subject matter that I think should be addressed in this fashion more often. Of course you'll have your detractors for handling stuff like this, but really, who cares? lol. Nice post you've got here. |
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