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''Perfect'' Poem
Contributed by
xoBrokenxo
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Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 02:22:19 PM in AEST
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I want to write this awesome poem
That everyone will want to keep in an album.
But every time I try,
It comes out boring and dry.
And most of the time, it’s about the same guy.
I want to write something worth remembering,
Something that will make people wonder how I came up with such a thing.
Yet every time I try,
It leaves me wondering why.
I want to write something so beautiful that it will bring someone to tears,
Something that will help people face their fears.
But I’ve only been doing this for a few years.
So every time I try,
It comes out pathetic enough to make me want to cry.
I can’t seem to get my point across well enough.
It sounds almost…rough.
And then add in the rhymes…
I may as well go stand with the mimes.
I try and I try to write something incredibly great,
But I think I shall just accept my fate.
Writing the “perfect” poem is something that will have to wait.
Copyright ©
xoBrokenxo
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by shelby on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 02:31:23 PM AEST
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We all have our unique way of writing for one.
I myself know when I try to hard for that "perfect poem" it does not transpire. Cut it lose let it go......
I like your writes, at times I think you do try to hard to force the rhyme, (as we all do at times) play around with it dont worry so much! You do have it in you.
When someone stirs the reader there is your start!
Keep going do not give up and dont cry it is all good.
Hugs
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by Vic on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 02:57:44 PM AEST
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nice..
when words portray what you feel in the heart, it cannot be imperfect..
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by Alex23 on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 05:41:17 PM AEST
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There is senseless shame and humility all over this one. You admit that your best is yet to come, and by saying that, you challenge yourself every time you write, which is what it's all about.
haha, I really liked this one. Put me back to Earth. |
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 12:59:18 AM AEST
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This is good....I echo what Shelby, Vic and Alex wrote.....Keep at it.... What may not appear perfect to you may stir up emotions in another and be that 'perfect ' poem...
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by Thespia on
Monday, 7th July 2008 @ 11:10:57 PM AEST
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Art, no matter what it is, a painting, a story
or a poem, is perfect if it came from the
heart and emotions of the artist.
This was beautiful.
Keep it up
frm
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by Catalina on
Sunday, 21st September 2008 @ 01:44:23 PM AEST
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| Nicely done. I loved it! Thankx 4 sharing! |
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Re: ''Perfect'' Poem
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by ragman on
Monday, 29th September 2008 @ 04:21:21 AM AEST
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| ....the "perfect" poem is singular to each person....i liked this one as it shows the inner struugle in an attempt for self-satisfaction....believe me....it is eternal....did poe think that his were any good....or anyone else?....i thankyou for this poem :) |
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