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The Dreamer
Contributed by
Puppy
on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 06:25:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
secrets
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I never spoke of you to anyone,
I kept you hidden in my heart and you did the same,
We would talk in private,
We would whispers our secrets in the darkness,
We would hold each other when we thought nobody was looking,
We would smile at our private jokes,
We would stare longingly at each other from across the room knowing we could do nothing,
Now our secret is a secret no more,
We no longer talk in private or whisper our secret in the dakness,
We no longer hold each other or smile at private jokes,
We no longer stare at each other from across the room....
you can't even look me in eyes anymore.......
I wish it didn't have to be this way.........
Copyright ©
Puppy
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2008-04-26 06:25:24]
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Re: The Dreamer
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by juliestevens18 on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 08:06:53 AM AEST
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| great poem.. a little confused as to what the secret is.. but good write! |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by MajesticPoet on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 09:57:20 AM AEST
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Wow this is a great write. It makes me think of two people that want to be with eachother, but one wont leave the current relationship they are in. Almost like an adultry type write. Very well written.
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Re: The Dreamer
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 10:44:01 AM AEST
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This is truly lovely. I think I understand the secret.... I've been there...and that look across a crowded room, though very special..can also be torture..
Jenni |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by shelby on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 11:00:33 AM AEST
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I think I get the jest of this maybe two people in other relationships so it is a forbidden love sort of deal.
Nicely written poem, made the reader get right in to the thoughts and the secrets
Michelle |
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Re: The Dreamer
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by jesusofholland on
Tuesday, 29th April 2008 @ 05:18:40 AM AEST
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| Great write! The knowing glance between secret lovers is a great way to portray this concept. You truly know and feel this! But the loss is sad! And not being able to talk about it must be one of the hardest things you've endured. Fantastic work. |
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