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My Closure
Contributed by
alibof10
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Friday, 25th April 2008 @ 05:28:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I got so used to having her around
I got so used to being in her arms
I got so used to staying up all night
I got so used to being hurt at sight
I got so used to loving only her
I got so used to having a lover
I lost it all in less than a minute
I lost is all and I took the bullet
I lost it all and couldn’t face the fact
I lost it all … was this just an act?
I lost my soul and it won't come back
I lost my heart and everything’s black
Is this a nightmare, dear god please let it be
I really want her, but I wonder if also she …
I love her, I got nothing to hide
It’s the truth, I wish I could abide
I know why she had to lie
But a lie after a lie, God I wonder why
This is killing me, but I cannot trust
This is killing me, but it’s a must
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alibof10
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2008-04-25 05:28:41]
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Re: My Closure
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by BRIDGI on
Saturday, 26th April 2008 @ 10:13:38 AM AEST
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i like it..its very emotinal....shows you really love her and want to be with her...gosh i love all your poems!!! lol..
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Re: My Closure
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by althea_kendry on
Thursday, 8th May 2008 @ 05:38:30 AM AEST
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you left out the most crucial part ,, the part that explains the title a little better ,, i'm not sure why you left it out but i think its important so i hope you don't mind but i'm putting the end here if anyone else wants to see. and i say i hope you don't mind because i'm going to do it either way so it would suck if you did mind.
"Goodbye, to you I say
Goodbye, I will try to be ok
Take care and remember your promise
If I never mattered, then please do it for Jesus …"
also even if you don't like the way you wrote a poem you shouldn't alter it because then you alter the meaning of the poem too and it loses some of what it meant before. changing it is ok but you should have both versions not just one
well this is my opinion anyway i could be totally off-base and out-of-line but ,, you know i really don't care anymore and maybe i am wrong about all that i've written but i still believe the last paragraph is crucial to the poem so i'm posting this comment. |
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