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Letting Go
Contributed by
jantra
on
Thursday, 17th April 2008 @ 04:31:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Part One: Lingering
I still see you beyond the sun,
beneath the snow,
inside the flowers that grow wild out my back door,
among the dreams left lying on my pillow.
You are the cause of tears for the weeping willow.
Part Two: Escape
I run until the world becomes a blur,
until the whir of his voice in my ear disappears,
until sweat leaves my body in great rushing rivers,
until my breathing nearly disappears,
until mountains flatten into great plains,
until the sun, my sun, is replaced with snow.
But it is a failed attempt at letting him go.
Part Three: Disguise
When the sun breaks through the clouds I smile,
and for awhile my laugh becomes raucous and grating.
And light spirits are something I try out for awhile,
like a new dress.
I skip, I sing, and backfloat for hours down the most beautiful creek,
washing away tears dripping down my cheeks.
It is the disguise the creates the guise of happiness which allows me to keep holding on.
Part Four: Anger
It isn't fair that I use my powers to return the leaves to the trees,
rewinding and reliving instead of living.
Why am I choosing to remain a statue frozen in happier times?
I beat on the ground, and scream at the trees.
I fall to my knees and wish to god I could make him leave the air I breathe.
But the sick have no power over disease.
Part Five: The Inevitabilities
It's inevitable that my back would begin to hurt from carrying him around so long,
It's inevitable that someone who always preferred to live in the past instead of the now should grow tired.
It's inevitable that the happiness we shared that I had been storing away like jewels would begin to lose their shine.
Is it..can it be time to let him go?
Part Six: Resolution
The sun sinks into waiting shadows,
urging me on.
My fingers are cramped and hardened into the fist I kept you in.
But slowly they unfurl like new spring flowers,
and you disappear into the second that passes.
I have let go
Copyright ©
jantra
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2008-04-17 16:31:55]
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Re: Letting Go
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by SilverRain on
Thursday, 17th April 2008 @ 05:10:51 PM AEST
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| A truely beautiful and touching piece. Very well contruction...almost visually written...enjoyed this a lot! Well done. |
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Re: Letting Go
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by purplestary on
Friday, 18th April 2008 @ 01:03:19 AM AEST
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| I love this poem..especialy the way you set it up into parts like that...this was such an amazing ride through the emotions and stages you went through to ..let go...i really really enjoyed this..nicely done. |
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Re: Letting Go
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 18th April 2008 @ 02:43:30 AM AEST
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Very sad, but I appluad you for finding the determination and strength to move on...
I enjoyed the progression from one stage to another.... well done... Jenni |
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Re: Letting Go
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by Rhei76 on
Friday, 25th April 2008 @ 04:07:23 PM AEST
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I believe you write beautifully. I can feel every word, but still I think you try to hard.
don't get me wrong these things you write are good, but you know me, structure isn't wild. |
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Re: Letting Go
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by Puppy on
Sunday, 11th May 2008 @ 04:23:53 AM AEST
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This is beautiful poem that i can really relate to...must admit thou i think iam still in stage 3 but i will let go eventually! thanks for making it a little easier....
Puppy :) |
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Re: Letting Go
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by jessb3 on
Friday, 3rd October 2008 @ 12:56:02 PM AEST
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| This poem is absolutely beautiful and I can definitely relate to it. Great work! :o) |
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Re: Letting Go
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by jantra on
Friday, 3rd October 2008 @ 06:07:51 PM AEST
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| i dont made it on this site too often so thanks for the kind words. im glad this is something you can relate to. sadly its kind of never ending cycle ive found at least with me. every breakup ive found myself reliving this all over again although it has gotten easier as ive gotten older and wiser or perhaps more jaded lol. good luck to you! |
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