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The meeting
Contributed by
nirvana12
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Wednesday, 16th April 2008 @ 10:21:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The light flickers as you slam the front door. I say "hello," as if it were a chore.
You ask "how was my day," after a disappointed sigh. I told you it was good, were both so used to this lie.
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Re: The meeting
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by jantra on
Wednesday, 16th April 2008 @ 05:26:50 PM AEST
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| This is intriguing but it feels disappointedly unfinished. as it is it is not a poem it is only two pretty well written lines of what looks like something that could end up being a pretty good poem. dont leave it at this i want to read more. it does not even address "the meeting" described in the title. from what ive read here a better title would be "this lie"... just a thought. :) |
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Re: The meeting
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by Rhei76 on
Wednesday, 16th April 2008 @ 05:45:56 PM AEST
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| I don't know, it just felt sad. |
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