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Slipping away
Contributed by
SilverRain
on
Friday, 11th April 2008 @ 05:56:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Today as I close my eyes
and the darkness folds me in
I totally surrender to all
and drift away
No more cares in this place and time
no more responsibilities
no more tears and people to hurt
no more possibilities
but my heart keeps on crying
to you, the one I love
“please hold me and pull me back
out of this space where I can no longer breath..”
as I close my eyes
and I swallow
all that will take me away
I reach out just one more time
but this time you weren’t there
and slowly I drift away.
Copyright ©
SilverRain
... [
2008-04-11 17:56:45]
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Re: Slipping away
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by deadwriter on
Friday, 11th April 2008 @ 09:26:13 PM AEST
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Very well written.
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Re: Slipping away
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by Amorita on
Friday, 11th April 2008 @ 09:37:08 PM AEST
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Very Powerful poem... really good :)
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Re: Slipping away
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by ZiggyB on
Friday, 11th April 2008 @ 11:01:23 PM AEST
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| Another sweet one. Good reading. |
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Re: Slipping away
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 12th April 2008 @ 06:11:24 AM AEST
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So sad....hope it improves for you... nicely done...
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Re: Slipping away
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 12th April 2008 @ 09:55:36 PM AEST
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| very sad write. theres just something about those last two lines that realy stand out..i don't know why....it just brings out that wonder...makes you wonder how many people are hanging onto one person, or one thing...powerfull write. |
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