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Distorted
Contributed by
a7x36
on
Monday, 7th April 2008 @ 06:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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In a flash of rage,
I smashed my bathroom mirror
With my soft right hand balled
Into an impenetrable fist.
Now I casually clean the blood,
Taking the tweezers and picking each shard from my skin.
Leave the mess where it lie and ask no questions.
Copyright ©
a7x36
... [
2008-04-07 18:00:00]
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Re: Distorted
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Monday, 7th April 2008 @ 10:49:31 PM AEST
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I like the way the brevity of the poem almost mirrors the act (no pun intended on the word mirror).
Nice write
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Re: Distorted
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by althea_kendry on
Tuesday, 8th April 2008 @ 05:48:54 AM AEST
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i like it lots :) i've broken a bathroom mirror before .... hh .. it hurt a lot tho so i dnt recommend it .... anywho
great poem i like how its short :) |
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Re: Distorted
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th April 2008 @ 10:59:25 PM AEST
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This poem stands out to me because you didn't write about what happened to cause the flash of rage, instead you nonchalantly describe your reaction. Although clearly you were angry, you seem to have been calm when you wrote this. Well done and great imagery.
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